Running Head: FEEDBACK 1
Summative Assignment Part One
ENG 122
SNHU
Jacqueline Amoah
7 February 2021
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In the past, I have not paid much attention to revision. The revision approach that I
mainly used involved rewording my own thoughts. Apart from this, I did not do anything and I
did not try to learn from my past experience. As I did not understand the importance of revision,
I never got the opportunity to identify my weaknesses and work on them.
The revision strategy from Module Five that I would like to use for the purpose of
revising the critical analysis essay is large scale and small scale revision strategy. I have chosen
such a method so that I could adopt a holistic and integrated approach to revise. By adopting the
large scale revision method I would be able to examine various aspects relating to the critical
essay such as the quality, communication style, and structure. The small scale revision approach
would involve proofreading the work and focusing on the clarity, grammatical use, spelling and
punctuation (Writing: Strategies for Developing Skills, 2020).
The feedback that I received was quite constructive. I got an insight into some of the key
areas that I need to work upon so that my essay could be more captivating for the readers. My
writing plan was straight forward which gave a logical flow to the entire work. But I believe that
there is further scope for me to improve my critical essay. I personally believe that the more I
revise the essay, the more I would be able to effectively present the message in a professional
way.
After receiving outside feedback, I would like to make a few changes in my critical
essay. For instance, I would try to adopt a more descriptive approach so that the intended
message can be explained to the readers in a better way.
Audience
An audience that could derive benefit by reading my critical essay is students. Generally
students have a preconceived notion about the English language. The essay would be an eye-
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opener for them as I have presented Tan’s views regarding the importance of all kinds of English
languages. Some of the characteristics of the audience include young age between 14 years and
22 years and male and female gender.
A number of potential challenges could arise before me while trying to connect with the
audience with my writing. One of the main challenges relates to the use of limited vocabulary. I
generally use specific terms while writing in English. Thus there is scope for me to expand my
vocabulary so that the audience would be interested to read the critical essay and understand the
underlying message that has been presented.
A few choices that I can make within my writing for the purpose of connecting with this
audience include expanding my vocabulary. Apart from this, I also need to think in a creative
and unique way while presenting my thoughts on the topic so that the essay could be more
engaging for the audience. Such approaches can help to connect with the chosen audience group
i.e. students.
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References
Writing: Strategies for Developing Skills . (2020). https://www.pdst.ie/sites/default/files/Writing
%20Strategies%20for%20Developing%20Skills.pdf.
