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E : P TPERSUASIVE
SSAY REWRITING EMPLATE
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each component of the planning to ensure that your content is correct.
Step 1: Argument Essay Thesis Statement and Planning
Directions: Complete all of the elements of the planning; otherwise, the content of your piece
will not be accurate.
My Topic: Is dieting healthy?
Topic: You will choose 1 from the following topics for your Persuasive Essay:
Should children participate in chores at home?
Should schools teach financial literacy?
Do all students need to learn a foreign language?
Should households be required to recycle?
Is dieting healthy?
Can money buy happiness?
My Attitude: Dieting can be detrimental to a persons health
My Purpose: To inform people on the dangers of dieting and what can make it unhealthy.
My Thesis Statement: Diet culture as a whole has become out of control, with new fad diets
emerging such as Intermittent Fasting, Liquid Diet, and Weight Watchers that overall can be
hazardous to the human body.
My Audience:
1.How much does my audience know about my subject?
a.At one point, majority of people have tried some forn of dieting and can attest to
how it affected them.
2.Age? Gender? Race? Social status? Location? Religion?
a.Most targeted ages would be age 14 and up
b.Any gender, race, social status, and location
c.Diets have been implemented in specific religions due to their beliefs
3.Where does my audience stand on the issue; are they opposed or neutral?
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a.Most will be neutral but there are going to be some opposed who are fans of
dieting
Outline:
I.Introduction Paragraph
a)In the last five years, dieting has changed tremendously to the point where it can
cause long term side effects on a persons health if not approved by a medical
professional.
b)Diet culture as a whole has become out of control, with new fad diets emerging
such as Intermittent Fasting, Liquid Diet, and Weight Watchers that overall can be
hazardous to the human body.
II.Body Paragraph #1
a.Intermittent Fasting has the human body going through periods of starvation
b.It’s used as a tool to drop weight quickly
c.It does not let your body regulate when it is time to eat and essentially leaves you
more hungry, ultimately eating more.
III.Body Paragraph #2
a.Liquid Diet is usually a diet done as a sort of cleanse to “rid the body of any
toxins” one may have consumed over a period of time
b.You are only consuming liquids and no solids over a desired period of time
c.Some will do this for two to three days while others have been known to continue
it for several days
d.Your body is not necessarily getting the proper nutrients that you need
IV.Body Paragraph #3
a.Weight Watchers uses a point tracking system that deems certain foods are good
or bad for you
b.Leaves you feeling guilty about a cheat day
c.Has you questioning the amount of food you’re eating even if you are still hungry
V.Conclusion Paragraph
a.Fad diets are not necessarily approved by health professionals
b.Every human body is different and they all have different needs
c.If you want to lose weight, research and consulting a professional is often the best
option rather than trying a fad diet that could do more damage mentally and
physically.
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Step 2: Persuasive Essay: First Draft
I Have to Watch What I Eat, I’m on a Diet
Have you ever found yourself wishing you could shed ten more pounds or wishing you
would go down a pants size? As someone who went from a size zero to a size 6 within a matter
of 3 years, I found myself having to watch what I eat and exercise regularly for the first time in
my life. Dieting was something extremely new to me and when I delve deeper into this
newfound world, I found myself realizing how truly unhealthy society has made the process of
eating correctly. In the last five years, dieting has changed tremendously to the point where it can
cause long term side effects on a persons health if not approved by a medical professional. Diet
culture as a whole has become out of control, with new fad diets emerging such as Intermittent
Fasting, Liquid Diet, and Weight Watchers that overall can be hazardous to the human body.
One diet that most people will try out if they are seriously trying to lose weight, and more
quick than is healthy, is Intermittent Fasting. Intermittent Fasting is a type of diet where you go
periods of your day without eating. There are apps that can be downloaded on to one’s phone that
can be used to track what times of the day are used for fasting and which are used for eating.
When one uses this app, they can go in and select how much weight they are trying to lose in a
certain amount of time based on their body weight and the app will tell them what to do to get
there. This most certainly is not healthy. When the Intermitent Fasting diet is being used, one is
essentially starving themselves and depriving their body of the nutrients they need. The human
body signals you when its hungry and ready to eat, so by depiriving it of eating when its ready,
you can ultimately damage your body further.
Another more dangerous diet that can be used for different reasons is the Liquid Diet.
Liquid diets can range from just drinking water over a period of time or alternating with water,
smoothies, and juices. Once again, if this diet is used incorrectly, it can do more harm than good.
Some people have used this diet for maybe a day or two after a weekend of unhealthy eating to
essentially cleanse their body of toxins. However, it is when it is used for a long period of time
such as weeks where it can cause the most damage. By only consuming liquids, your body is not
getting the proper nutrients it needs to survive and you can find yourself experiencing more
health issues like blurred vision, headaches, and so on.
The last, and possibly most popular diet, is the Weight Watchers program. Weight
Watchers uses a points system based on your body weight, weight loss experience, and reason for
wanting to lose weight to essentially help you track your daily caloric intake. The program can
you give you somewhere around 30 points for each day and different foods can be anywhere
from 0 to 50 points just for one item. This diet program can be hazardous because the person
who is using it is now questioning every single thing they put into their body. They are no longer
enjoying what they eat anymore or trying to find a healthier alternative for something they love
to eat, rather than justifying why they can’t have it at all. This diet creates an unhealthy
relationship with food that can last a lifetime.
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Unfortunately with social media as popular as it is today, fad diets such as a Intermittent
Fasting, Liquid Diet, and Weight Watches are only going to become increasingly popular. Every
persons body is different and we all have different needs. What may work for one person will not
always work for the next and that is okay. If you want to lose weight, research and consulting a
professional is often the best option rather than trying a fad diet that could do more damage
mentally and physically.
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Step 3: Persuasive Essay: Rewriting
I Can’t Have That, It’s Ten Points
Have you ever found yourself wanting to shed ten more pounds or wishing you would go
down a pants size? As someone who went from a size zero to a size 6 within a matter of 3 years,
I found myself having to watch what I eat and exercise regularly for the first time in my life.
Dieting was something extremely new to me. When I delve deeper into this brand-new world, I
found myself realizing how truly unhealthy society has made the process of eating correctly. In
the last five years, dieting has changed tremendously to the point where it can cause long term
side effects on a persons mental and physical health if not approved by a medical professional.
Diet culture as a whole has become out of control, with new fad diets emerging such as
Intermittent Fasting, Liquid Diet, and Weight Watchers that can be hazardous to the human body.
One diet that most people will try out if they are trying to lose weight quickly is
Intermittent Fasting. Intermittent Fasting is a type of diet where you go through a length of time
during the day without eating. There are apps that can be downloaded on to one’s phone that can
be used to track what times of the day are used for fasting and which are used for eating. When
one uses this app, they can go in and select how much weight they are trying to lose in a certain
amount of time based on their body weight and the app will tell them what to do to get there.
When the Intermitent Fasting diet is being used, one is essentially starving themselves and
depriving their body of the nutrients they need. The human body signals you when its hungry
and ready to eat, so by depiriving it of eating when its ready, you can ultimately damage your
body further.
Another more dangerous diet that can be used for different reasons is the Liquid Diet.
Liquid diets can range from just drinking water over a period of time or alternating with water,
smoothies, and juices. Moreover, if this diet is used incorrectly, it can do more harm than good.
Some people have used this diet for maybe a day or two after a weekend of unhealthy eating to
essentially cleanse their body of toxins. However, it is when it is used for a long period of time
such as weeks where it can cause the most damage. By only consuming liquids, your body is not
getting the proper nutrients it needs to survive and you can find yourself experiencing more
health issues like blurred vision, headaches, and so on.
The last, and possibly most popular diet, is the Weight Watchers program. Weight
Watchers uses a points system based on your body weight, weight loss experience, and reason for
wanting to lose weight to essentially help you track your daily caloric intake. The program can
you give you somewhere around 30 points for each day and different foods can be anywhere
from 0 to 50 points just for one item. This diet program can be hazardous because the person
who is using it is now questioning every single thing they put into their body. They are no longer
enjoying what they eat anymore or trying to find a healthier alternative for something they love
to eat, rather than justifying why they can’t have it at all. This diet creates an unhealthy
relationship with food that can last a lifetime.
Unfortunately with social media as popular as it is today, fad diets such as a Intermittent
Fasting, Liquid Diet, and Weight Watches are only going to become increasingly trendy. Every
persons body is unique and we all have different needs. What may work for one person will not
always work for the next and that is okay. If you want to lose weight, research and consulting a
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professional is often the best option rather than trying a fad diet that could do more damage
mentally and physically.
Step 4: Persuasive Essay: Honor Statement
Read and sign this honor statement prior to submitting your assignment:
By typing my name in the space provided, I certify that all words and ideas in my writing
assignment are mine alone, and, if I used another person’s words or ideas (by summarizing,
paraphrasing, or directly quoting), I gave credit to that author, and I also put quotation marks
around any direct quotations.
By signing my name, I also understand that, if I have copied someone else’s ideas or words, I
have plagiarized, and I understand that the penalty for plagiarism is course failure.
Student Name: _Marrisa Brown________________________________________
SHONOR TATEMENT
