Rewrite and fix the essay

Rewrite the WHOLE essay .I attached the PDFs which have comment on it .You need to look at the comments and keep the good part and rewrite the rest of it. Please follow :

1.Use the “The severity of an action is reduced when euphemism is applied, and this can be referred to as camouflaging bad deeds in society.” as the thesis.(WHICH IN THE 7^TH PARAGRAPH)

2.Please set essay as :Introduction

                  Thesis

                  Theory: What is euphemism

                  Apply to texts :

                       From least to most unethical decision

Please be write in organized and clear understanding, the original one was lack of focus unity, purpose. And paragraph lack focus

Be focused, do not write general sentences.