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After reviewing this study there were a couple of strengths that stood out. First, the articles cited
were relevant to the study, which made the discussion section easy to understand. Secondly, the
table and figure used are easy to read and correctly changed from color to grayscale as stated in
Section 7.26 in the APA manual(American Psychological Association, 2020).
There was also a few errors, stated below, that can be easily fixed by the author.
1. The reference section should start with a new page break bringing the reference title to the top
of the page instead of the middle as stated in Section 2.12 in the APA manual (American
Psychological Association, 2020).
2. Figure 1 should be called out within the text or cited as stated in Section 7.5 of the APA
manual, instead it is randomly stated making it confusing with how the figure is related to the text
(American Psychological Association, 2020).
3. The results section should come before the discussion section, following the layout described
in the video presentation for this week (St. Peters, M., 2021).
After reviewing your study, I was able to find some strengths regarding your study. The first
strength was that the articles that you shared within your study were relevant and helpful while
discussing the relationship between religion, anxiety, and depression. The articles enhanced your
study from the survey results and helped create a strong discussion. The second strength was that
your table and figure were easy to read and understand. However, I did stumble across to find
some errors within your study. The first error was that I did not see that you called out the figure
within your text based on the APA manual. Due to the figure not being mentioned within the text;
it appears confusing because the figure is not discussed within the paragraphs that correlate the
study together. Therefore, I would suggest writing a few sentences that discuss the figure and
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correlate with your discussion. The second error that I found was that there were a few grammar
errors when discussing the percentages among the participants. I would suggest rewriting the
percentages to flow appropriately within your discussion and checking the APA manual to correct
these sentences. The third error that I found was the results section should appear before the
discussion. I would suggest looking over the layout based on the video presentation to
appropriately correct the layout of the paper
References
American Psychological Association. (2020). Publication manual of the American Psychological
Association 2020: The official guide to APA style (7th ed.). American Psychological Association.
St. Peters, M. (2021, November 10). Scientific writing: results and discussion [Video]. Liberty
University. https://canvas.liberty.edu/courses/336469/pages/watch-scientific-writing-results-and-
discussion?module_item_id=25799373
