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Attempts Attempt 1 score is1.5Attempt2 score is2Attempt 3 was not attempted.-
Keep the Highest 2 out of 22 / 2
Points:
1 / 1
Close Explanation
Explanation:
The correct synonym for consistent is "unchanging." Consistent means to be similar throughout. In a
piece of writing, each sentence and paragraph should be consistent to avoid confusion.
The correct synonym for parallelism is "similarity." Parallelism is a balance of two or more similar
words, phrases, or clauses. Parallelism, or parallel structure, is an important trait in good writing.
The correct synonym for revise is "edit." When you revise, you edit your draft. As you edit your draft,
you can revise it for consistency and parallelism.
Directions: Jay's final essay is due in his English class tomorrow. He wrote a first draft of his essay a
few weeks ago. Which of the following actions should Jay take? Check all that apply.
Check his draft over but do not rewrite anything
7. Revising for Consistency and Parallelism - Introduction
If people knew how hard I worked to get my mastery, it wouldn't seem so wonderful at all. —
Michelangelo
Painting is a skill that takes time and effort to master. Michelangelo was an Italian painter and lived
from 1475 until 1564. It took Michelangelo four years to complete his most famous work of art, the
Sistine Chapel ceiling. During those years, Michelangelo worked hard and patiently revised his work
until the ceiling became a masterpiece.
Like painting, writing is also a skill that requires practice, careful revision, and hard work. Good writers
revise their work to produce their own written masterpieces.
The terms consistent, parallelism, and revise represent important traits in good writing. How well
do you know these terms?
Directions: In the following table, click on each blank line in the right-hand column, and choose the
correct Synonym from the dropdown menu for the term in the left-hand column.
Term
Consistent
Parallelism
Revise
Synonym
Error! Filename not specified.Unchanging
Error! Filename not specified.Similarity
Error! Filename not specified.Edit
Make sure that his draft is consistent
Avoid checking for consistency of number and person
Make sure that his draft has verb tense variety
Check for confusing shifts in verb tense
Points:
1 / 1
Close Explanation
Explanation:
The correct actions Jay should take are "make sure that his draft is consistent" and "check for
confusing shifts in verb tense." Jay should rewrite anything in his first draft that is confusing. Jay should
also edit his first draft for consistency of tense, number, and person.
Directions: Read the sentences from the first and final draft of Lucinda's essay. Then answer the
questions.
Draft A
There was a Great Depression in 1929. The Great Depression began on October 24, 1929. The stock
market crashed because investors were selling stocks and panic. By 1933, nearly 25% of American
people were without a job and hoping. It was a historic time. It was a pivotal time in American history.
Draft B
The Great Depression began on October 24, 1929. The stock market crashed because investors were
selling stocks and panicking. By 1933, nearly 25% of American people were without a job and without
hope. It was a historic and pivotal moment in American history.
Which draft is Lucinda's final draft?
Draft B
Draft A
Points:
1 / 1
How do you know which draft is the final draft?
The final draft reads more smoothly because it switches verb tenses.
The final draft reads more smoothly because it maintains a parallel structure.
The final draft reads more smoothly because it maintains consistent verb tense but not parallel
structure.
Points:
1 / 1
Close Explanation
Explanation:
"Draft B" is the correct final draft. Lucinda revised her essay to maintain parallel structure, and she
took out unnecessary sentences. She changed panic to panicking and hoping to without hope to add
smoothness and balance to her writing. She combined the last two short sentences into one sentence
in draft B.
Source: "The Great Depression." History.com. A & E Networks Digital, 2016,
www.history.com/topics/great-depression. Accessed 13 Oct. 2016.
