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I've started but I didn't get a good feed back on my thesis. I need help with it plus more. PLEASE DO NOT US AI! NO PLAGIARISM 

I've included my The sis, Out line, and bibliography. I need to redo my the sis. This is her feedback:

There is a lot to say about de Silva- and sometimes that is a double edged sword. Her biography is important, but should take a back seat to her architecture and designs. For your final tour script, focus on her unique contributions as an architect, and how the three different sites can illustrate her impact. I would be glad to discuss further with you- see me in office hours and let's make this a really strong project.

Thesis

Thesis present but lacks clarity or fails to fully capture the main arguments. Revise the thesis for clarity and relevance to better reflect the main arguments of the assignment

Criterion Feedback

This is all such interesting information, but it needs more focus. It's crucial that your thesis serves as a roadmap for your tour, clearly reflecting the key ideas you'll explore. I would like to see a more robust final thesis to guide your inquiry into de Silva. If you haven’t written a history paper in a while it can feel challenging. I recommend this website, which has great tips:

Outline

Basic outline present but lacks depth or clear organization of ideas. Topics are broadly defined or tangentially related to thesis. Details are general and barely support topic.

Criterion Feedback

Outline needs revision/Recommended Next Steps:

-Focus on core task- a guided tour of the site

-Conduct targeted research using sources listed in bibliography

-Refine thesis to a more manageable scope

-Ensure that you select 3 sites to focus the bulk of your writing on. And that they illuminate your thesis

-Reorganize outline with clear main points and supporting sub-points.

Visit my office hours to discuss outline refinement and strategy to make this a strong and well organized investigation of de Silva

My sources

Nunes, Ines Leonor. “Jane Drew and Minnette De Silva Pioneering Participatory Architecture in Mid-Century India and Sri Lanka.” Joelho Revista de Cultura Arquitectonica, no. 15 (May 9, 2024): 59–72.  https://doi.org/10.14195/1647-8681_15_4.

Robson, David. “Andrew Boyd and Minnette de Silva: Two Pioneers of Modernism in Ceylon.” thinkMATTER (blog), March 4, 2015.  https://thinkmatter.in/2015/03/04/andrew-boyd-and-minnette-de-silva-two-pioneers-of-modernism-in-ceylon/.

Siddiqi, Anooradha Iyer. “Crafting the Archive: Minnette De Silva, Architecture, and History.” The Journal of Architecture 22, no. 8 (November 17, 2017): 1299–1336.  https://doi.org/10.1080/13602365.2017.1376341.

Singha, Sumita. “Remembering Minnette de Silva: The Architect in a Sari.” RIBA Blog (blog), 2024.  https://www.architecture.com/about/equality-diversity-and-inclusion/remembering-minnette-de-silva.