story needs fixing. spruce it up. mainly more of steps one . do anything that'll make it better. received a 66% grade as is.

Your story should follow the plot outline below. 

Step 1: Build the World 

Who are the main characters? Where do they live? When? Select a date that is just on the other side of plausibility. 

Step 2: Insert Technology Inflection Point 

Choose a technology you are worried or excited about. What happens in the story that causes that same concern or excitement? 

Step 3: Explore the Ramifications 

What are the consequences of the inflection point or conflict? How are the characters or setting affected? 

Step 4: Insert Human Inflection Point 

How do the main characters adapt to what is going on? How do they change? What decision do they make? 

Step 5: Reveal What We Learned 

How does the setting or the main character change as a result of their reaction or interaction with the technology?