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After reviewing this study there were a couple of strengths that stood out. First, the articles
cited were relevant to the study, which made the discussion section easy to understand.
Secondly, the table and figure used are easy to read and correctly changed from color to
grayscale as stated in Section 7.26 in the APA manual(American Psychological Association,
2020).
There was also a few errors, stated below, that can be easily fixed by the author.
1. The reference section should start with a new page break bringing the reference title to
the top of the page instead of the middle as stated in Section 2.12 in the APA manual
(American Psychological Association, 2020).
2. Figure 1 should be called out within the text or cited as stated in Section 7.5 of the
APA manual, instead it is randomly stated making it confusing with how the figure is
related to the text (American Psychological Association, 2020).
3. The results section should come before the discussion section, following the layout
described in the video presentation for this week (St. Peters, M., 2021).
After reviewing your study, I was able to find some strengths regarding your study. The
first strength was that the articles that you shared within your study were relevant and
helpful while discussing the relationship between religion, anxiety, and depression. The
articles enhanced your study from the survey results and helped create a strong discussion.
The second strength was that your table and figure were easy to read and understand.
However, I did stumble across to find some errors within your study. The first error was
that I did not see that you called out the figure within your text based on the APA manual.
Due to the figure not being mentioned within the text; it appears confusing because the
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figure is not discussed within the paragraphs that correlate the study together. Therefore, I
would suggest writing a few sentences that discuss the figure and correlate with your
discussion. The second error that I found was that there were a few grammar errors when
discussing the percentages among the participants. I would suggest rewriting the percentages
to flow appropriately within your discussion and checking the APA manual to correct these
sentences. The third error that I found was the results section should appear before the
discussion. I would suggest looking over the layout based on the video presentation to
appropriately correct the layout of the paper
References
American Psychological Association. (2020). Publication manual of the American
Psychological Association 2020: The official guide to APA style (7th ed.). American
Psychological Association.
St. Peters, M. (2021, November 10). Scientific writing: results and discussion [Video].
Liberty University. https://canvas.liberty.edu/courses/336469/pages/watch-scientific-writing-
results-and-discussion?module_item_id=25799373
