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In response to your request for a peer review of your manuscript on the
relationship between intrinsic spirituality and grit, I have addressed what I
believe to be two areas of strength and three areas of potential improvement.
Strengths
1. The variables of interest are plainly stated. The null hypothesis is
clearly stated and accurately rejected, based on the results of a
Pearson’s r correlation, which was the appropriate statistical test to
use with these two scale variables.
2. The use of percentages is a meaningful way to represent the
demographic data collected, clearly showing the breakdown of
participants by age group. The sample size and method were also
presented concisely.
Weaknesses
1. Presenting the mean and standard deviation for age groups is not
particularly meaningful and it was unnecessary to include the SPSS
output for the demographic data, per the assignment instructions
(Harris, 2022).
2. Although you correctly rejected the null hypothesis, as supported by
the SPSS output, there were multiple errors in the statistical write up,
including: incorrect degrees of freedom, switching the values for r
and p (which indicates that the results are insignificant [0.49], when,
in fact, they are significant), inclusion of confidence intervals, and
failure to include both directionality (one or two-tailed) and the
coefficient of determination. Finally, because correlation does not infer
cause and effect, it would be more appropriate to conclude, “The null
hypothesis is rejected. There is a relationship between intrinsic
spirituality and grit” (St. Peters, 2022).
3. Throughout the manuscript, there are numerous errors related to
American Psychological Association (APA) style and formatting.
• “Results,” “Discussion,” and “References” are presented with Level 2
headings, but they each require the use of Level 1 headings (APA,
2.27).
• The tables and figures are incorrectly formatted. Both the number
and title should be above the table, following specific formatting
instructions regarding the use of bold or italic font, title case, and
spacing (APA, 7.9). aa
• In regards to in-text citation, the ampersand is used in parenthetical
citation with two authors (APA, 8.17); three or more authors requires
the use of “et al.” (APA, 8.17). All information based on others’ work
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must be cited. For example, the manuscript states, “One theory
suggests that because gratitude is…” Which theory? According to
whom (APA, 8.1)?
• In regards to the reference list, the first entry is missing an author;
entries 1, 3, and 5 are presented using title case, but sentence case
is appropriate; entry 3 is missing a DOI (APA 9.7, 9.19, 9.35).
• Defining “Grit” every time that it used, is redundant (APA, 4.5).
• Revealed is misspelled (“reveled”), in the Results section (APA, 4.3).
As you continue to prepare for publication, I hope that this feedback proves
useful.
In reviewing your writing, you have a couple of strengths and weaknesses that
I have identified and would like to bring to your attention. One of your very
apparent strengths is the professional tone of your article, which makes the
paper easy to read. Your second strength is that your supporting articles are
relevant to your topic. They provide additional information on previous findings.
The relevant information also assisted in keeping my attention and making me
desire to continue reading. However, your areas that need improvement are
related to APA formatting that is either missing or incorrect. First, your Results
section should follow directly behind the Methods section and be Level 1
headings. Level one headings are bold and centered with the title case
heading. Also, your Discussion section should follow the same format as Level
one heading, see Section 2.27 (American Psychological Association, 2020, p.
47). Second, your figure components are also not APA formatted.
The figure number should be above the figure in bold, not below; see section
7.23 (American Psychological Association, 2020, p. 225). Also, in Figure 1, to
make your information more concise, you should have three columns of data, aa
the participant's age group, the number of participants in the age group, and
their weighted percentage in the survey. The arrows may require the reader to
go back up to the information to ensure they understand what you are
relaying. Lastly, your parenetical and in-text citations need to be double-checked
to ensure they are APA 7 formatted. For instance, you have the authors
written as (Chopik, Newton and Jarden 2017); however, this should be (Chopik
et al., 2017). APA 7 guidelines indicate that three or more authors should be
shortened using et al. as a replacement for the remaining authors; see Section
8.12 (American Psychological Association, 2020, p. 263). Therefore, I suggest
that you double-check your APA formatting throughout your article and spelling
and make any necessary corrections.
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References
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American Psychological Association. (2020). Publication manual of the
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Harris, D. (2022). Discussion thread: M6 research project review. Research
Methods
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St. Peters, M. (2022). Correlation and Regression in SPSS. Research Methods
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