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Step 1: Illustration Paragraph: Prewriting
Topic: Tesla’s are extremely safe family vehicles.
Attitude/Point: to inform readers about the safety of Tesla.
Audience: people who have similar interest in Tesla’s
Purpose: to inform
Topic Sentence: Tesla the family electric vehicle is one of the safest vehicles in the market.
Brainstorm List of Possible Examples: Safety Automation Reliability Affordability Style
Sentence Outline:
Safety
Shell
Low roll over risk
Automation
Auto pull forward/avoid.
365 camera computers always thinking.
Reliability and Affordability
Home charging
No oil changes.
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Step 2: Illustration Paragraph: First Draft
Tesla the family electric vehicle is one of the safest vehicles in the market.The shell of the
vehicle is designed I nsucha a way that is absobes and crumpst the impact away from
ourbodys.With having the battery under the car it serves a fouble porpoise it helps precvent s
rollovers and in the evet of an car accisdent it will help keep the inside of the car secure.Telsa
has a super comuter on board that is constenly thinking. It can detect a possible car acadent
bedfor our brain even reconises it. With having full automation the car can quickly oull forward
avoicing a real end collation of your car. Or it can stop and munover around a car infront of you
avoind another car crash.Tesla is not like trsidation cars it doens not require aby oilcahnes spark
plug replcamts or evein fuild repenisments thus making it an extremely affordable vehcial. The
cars can even chage in the confmort of you driveway that way it will always be ready at
moments notice. With hundreds of supercharges nations wide you will always have somerher to
quickly charge up.
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Step 3: Illustration Paragraph: Rewriting
Tesla, the family electric vehicle, is one of the safest vehicles on the market.
The car's shell was designed to absorb and crumple the impact away from our
bodies. Having the battery under the vehicle serves a double purpose. It helps
prevent rollovers, and in the event of an accident, it will help keep the inside
of the car secure. Tesla has a supercomputer on board that is constantly
thinking. It can detect a possible car accident before our brain even
recognizes it. With full automation, the car can quickly pull forward, avoiding
a rear-end collision with your vehicle. Or it can stop and maneuver around a
car in front of you to prevent another car crash. The computer can distinguish
between a person walking, riding a bike, or even another vehicle next to you.
With its onboard radar, cameras, and computer, the car can make split-
second decisions that can save our lives. Tesla is not like classic cars. It does
not require oil changes, spark plug replacements, or even fluid replenishments,
thus making it an extremely affordable vehicle. The cars can even charge in
the comfort of your driveway; that way, they will always be ready at a
moment's notice. With hundreds of supercharges nationwide, you will always
have somewhere to charge up quickly.
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