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Directions: For each of the following, read the sentence or sentences and then answer the question
below.
I repeat again the words my teacher says in my German class.
Which of the following sentences is the best revision of the previous sentence?
I repeat the words my teacher says in my German class.
7. Concise Language - Avoiding Wordiness
Conciseness is the sister of talent. —Anton Chekhov (Russian playwright, 1860–1904)
Concise writing means avoiding unnecessary words in your writing.
Concise language
Example of wordy language:
I live in a city that never sleeps or the city named New York City.
Example of concise language:
I live in New York City, the city that never sleeps.
Explanation: In the concise sentence, the writer removes a repetitive phrase.
Directions: Which of the following sentences contain unnecessary words? Check all that apply.
Public schools are free.
Everyone should be allowed to study.
It is a true fact that college is too expensive.
In my opinion, I think we should not have to pay for college.
Isn't college important?
Points:
1 / 1
Close Explanation
Explanation:
Wordy Sentences
In my opinion, I think we
should not have to pay for
college.
It is a true fact that college is
too expensive.
Explanation and Revision
Both "In my opinion" and "I think" are not necessary.
Revise for conciseness: We should not have to pay for
college.
It is redundant, or repetitive, to use true and fact. Revise to
cut unnecessary words: College is too expensive.
I repeat again the words my teacher says in German class.
I repeat the words my teacher says in German class.
Points:
1 / 1
Close Explanation
Explanation:
The best revision is "I repeat the words my teacher says in German class." In the original sentence, the
words again and my are repetitive.
Avanthi is working for a small store that specializes in unique rugs. She is in charge of planning the
company's annual holiday party. Avanthi is planning on sending out an e-mail to her coworkers about
the party.
Which concise sentence should Avanthi include in her e-mail?
Please respond to me by 3:00 PM in the afternoon if you cannot attend.
Please respond to me no later than 3:00 PM if you cannot attend.
Please respond to me no later than 3:00 PM if you are a person who will attend.
Points:
1 / 1
Close Explanation
Explanation:
Only the sentence "Please respond to me no later than 3:00 PM if you cannot attend" is not wordy. The
other two choices are not concise. The phrase in the afternoon is repetitive next to PM, and the
phrase are a person who is unnecessary.
In order to sell his motorcycle as quickly as possible, Sanjay is posting an ad at school.
Which of the following wordy sentences should Sanjay not include in his ad?
This silver 2009 model is a great ride. You'll love this motorcycle!
This silver 2009 model is a great and excellent ride. You'll love this motorcycle!
This silver 2009 model is a great ride. You are going to love this motorcycle!
Points:
1 / 1
Close Explanation
Explanation:
Sanjay should not include the sentence "This silver 2009 model is a great and excellent ride" because
including both great and excellent is repetitive.
