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1. Use the active words for every sentence and 2. Dont use the sentence like " it is important to ..." or " there is ..." or " here is ...." Change it. 3.Change the resource of Impact 2.use one primary resource for supporting each claim and provide evidence. The resource must be primary source and the evidence must be quantitative. 4. Add 2-3 sentences your personal thinking for Impact 2 and 3.

5.the paper is 4.5 pages maximum. Every paragraph CAN NOT exceed 12 rows.