Introduction and thesis help on essay

WHAT I HAVE: 

Thesis: As a writer I have annotated authors and understanding the readings, learned and applied myself into the writing process, and properly revised essays and final drafts which is why I should proceed as an academic writer in English 1A.

What im looking for: 

An eye opening introduction

Explaining mostly postive stuff on how i should continue to the 

next class but that i do have flaws that can be worked on 

Fix my thesis 

IM ONLY LOOKING FOR 5 sentence on the intro. 6 including my thesis