english essay

what I need is final draft essay and I will post the draft that you will fix the mistakes on it . 

the theme is : old self versus new self. the main  idea of of the essay is that I am an international student during my first day on campus 

I have some notes from my professor that pease I need you to follow them while fixing the essay .

the notes is : you need to dramatize a couple of the more important events in specific detail. Also, you could forshadow the direction your essay will take so its is a little less surprising, but not unsurprising, you want to keep the impact of your shock.

please this is the note from my profesor the you have to follow them while you fixing and rewriting my essay.