BUSNESS WRITING

HEY 

I NEED YOU TO ANSWER THESE QUESTIONS, IN PARAGRAPH.

1- MAKE 3 SENTENSE MORE CONCISE ( AVOIDING REDUNDANCY, PADDED PHRASES, AND SEXIST LANGUAGE)

2- REVISE 3 SENTENCE , USE MORE PLAIN LANGUAGE ( AVOIDING LANGUAGE MORE FORMAL OR SHOWY THAN IT TO BE)

SEE THE ATTACHED FILE

THANKS