Fable Narrative
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English Composition I
Fable Narrative
02 February 2015
Modern Day Bremen Town Musicians
When a local high school teacher decided it was time to give up her job to a younger
intern, she texted her friends the good news. This inspired two of them, one a surgeon and one a
UPS driver, to follow in her footsteps and turn in their resignations. Soon they filled their days
together pursuing hobbies and interests, things that they did not have time for when they worked.
As the days turned into years, the three friends found themselves looking for additional help with
their daily lives and decided it was time to downsize and move. So when the Bremen Town
Musicians had reached their golden years, they moved to a senior community housing
development where their lives became empty and meaningless, which resulted in increased
hours watching television until they began volunteering at the local children’s hospital and
learned that helping others can bring much joy. [A1]
After all three friends retired, they were enjoying their time swimming at the YWCA,
quilting blankets for their church, and reading more books at the library. The teacher especially
liked her time reading where she could learn about new things. The surgeon enjoyed the quilting
the most to keep her hands active and limber. The UPS driver loved swimming because it helped
his achy back loosen up because [A2] years of driving took its toll on his body. These three friends
enjoyed retirement and life to its fullest until the day came when they all realized that age had
snuck up on them and it was time to slow down and move into a senior community housing
development.
At first it was a nice change of pace at their new home as [A3] meals were prepared for them
and their apartments were cleaned by the staff. Soon the three friends grew tired and restless
though, yearning for something to fill their time and big hearts. One lonely night after the next
was spent watching hours of local and national news. When a story about a local teen who had
become sick with a rare disease and needed to visit a treatment center on the other side of the
United States was finished, the surgeon had a wonderful idea: the three of them should
volunteer at the local children’s hospital. She was actually upset with herself for not thinking of
it sooner. They did not need to waste away at an old folk’s home; they could still be active
members of society. All three of them had skills to offer: the teacher could read to sick children
when their parents were not able to be with their kids and the UPS driver would chauffeur the out
of town parents back and forth from the hotel to the hospital. The surgeon decided she would be
best at taking the time to explain the procedures and tests to the children so they could better
understand what was happening and what to expect during the tests. [A4] All three of the friends
loved this idea and rejoiced in the fact that they would become needed and respected again.
They could not wait until the next day to go to the children’s hospital, so they called that night
after the news was over. They wanted to start enjoying their golden years right now and living
happily ever after.
Sometimes life is not everything we wish it to be, but we do have the choice to make it
what we want it to be. There three friends learned to become contributing members of society
after retiring, and suddenly their lives had purpose again. They each realized that although they
were not teaching in a classroom, performing surgery to save a life, or delivering the best
Christmas present ever, they were still helping others overcome difficult experiences. Their self
-worths grew, and they enjoyed life again[A5] .
[A1] Good thesis. It provides an overview of the story as it appears in the body paragraphs in addition to the new fable’s moral, which is also summarized in the conclusion.
[A2] Two words that are commonly, but mistakenly used for “because” are “as” and “since,” but there are others such as “being.” If you can replace “as” or another similar substitution with “because” and keep the same meaning, please do so. Remember, “as” means “at the same time,” so if your “as” represents this phrase, you can leave the term as is. Additionally, please note that “since” should be used only when you reference a time in the past: “since yesterday,” “since they began construction,” etc. Therefore, please make these changes where applicable.
IMPORTANT: If you have a comma before any of these terms, no matter the meaning, please omit the comma. A comma should never precede an “as,” “because,” or similar clause.
[A3] Remember to apply any grader feedback to all instances throughout the essay.
[A4] Good use of events that exemplify the essay’s moral.
[A5] Good conclusion that summarizes the major events in the story and explains the moral.
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