ENG 125 Introduction to Literature DQ 3 Week 4

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Paper Title: Literacy Analysis

No. of Pages: 2 pages

Paper Style: APA Paper Type: Other

Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No

Feedback Areas: Topic Development, Focus/Thesis Statement

Paper Goals: Compare your working thesis statement to the thesis statement in the Sample

Literary Analysis. Does your thesis address relevant points like the example

thesis? Then, look at a body paragraph in the sample Literary Analysis. Compare

its construction to a body paragraph in your own paper.

Proofing Summary:

Hello Ricardo,

I’m Anja, your tutor for the Writing Center. I have reviewed your submission and have several suggestions that will

help you revise. Please feel free to contact us through a live chat session with any follow-up questions or for any clarification.

Below, you will find a revision plan along with margin comments within your paper. Use my suggestions as a

starting point for the revision process. Also, please note that I have not edited or proofread the entire draft for

minor errors, but rather, focused on overall concerns such as idea development.

You have a good start on your essay. You have done a good job of picking out several areas through which to

analyze Mr. Kapasi.

For your revisions, I suggest focusing on:

1. Your thesis statement should 1) contain your debatable claim about the work, and 2) list the specific points you

will develop to support your claim. The thesis for a literary analysis should also state the approach that will be

taken to discuss the work. See the example below:

In “The Masque of the Red Death,” Poe uses the symbolism of the stranger, the clock, and the seventh room to

develop the theme of death.

Based on the sample thesis, the first supporting paragraph will be about how death is symbolized by the stranger.

The second supporting paragraph will be about how death is symbolized by the clock. The third supporting

paragraph will be about how death is symbolized by the seventh room.

For help writing a thesis, click here: http://tinyurl.com/h8psxx9

2. As you revise, I suggest working on your overall paragraph development. A good rule of thumb for college

papers is that paragraphs should be about 7-11 sentences long.

In general, all paragraphs need to have 3 pieces:

P-Point—also known as your topic sentence where you state what the paragraph is about

I-Information—where you present your information (facts, details, quotes, and reasons)

E-Explanation—where you explain the relevance or importance of your information

Please be sure to do all of this when writing your paragraphs. For help with this, check out this video tutorial on

writing paragraphs: http://tinyurl.com/zaxrn9x

Good luck in the course, and I hope we can help you with your next assignment.

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Remember to list the title of your essay first in this page. Otherwise, your title page is well formatted!

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This seems like it is the

closest to a claim. Remember

that the thesis should have

the topics of each of your

body paragraphs and an

arguable claim that you are

making about this work. It

should not be a mini plot summary.

This is a good topic! Consider

making the entire paragraph

about this idea and where it is

seen in the story.

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This seems like the main point

of this paragraph. Consider

making it the topic (first)

sentence and then developing

this idea.

This paragraph also looks

rather underdeveloped.

Remember that you need

to tell how or why these

things are significant to

the characterization.

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You have a good start on your

conclusion here, but remember

that you need to summarize the

main idea of each of your body

paragraphs separately.

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Remember that the book title

and journal name should be italicized.

In APA syle, this is a References page rather than a works cited.

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