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Secondary Source Integration

When talking about the theme, which is black live matter, sometimes a picture could better explain the content than words. This picture below demonstrates a black woman holding a plate, which says “BLACK LIVES MATTER”. She is yelling and fighting for her rights, because black Americans always have low status in society. This source could perfectly accord with my main theme because my theme is placed on importance of black Americans’ life. The picture conveys that black Americans are eager for safeguarding their rights. There are many unsolved problems of black Americans. Comment by LRC: The first paragraph should include the name of the photographer and the date and place the picture was first published.

The fact that the US is carrying some races is being used to show lots of discrimination on people who are black. It is in fact very clear that the white race is not going to accept to be equal with the black or any other people of color, and especially the black people. Injustices are shown to the black people from all the angles, right from their places of residence, their workplaces and even from the government. The efforts that the black people are making in trying to get balanced are not bearing any fruit, and instead, the efforts are making things worse (Edwards & Bradford, 2016) Comment by LRC: The second paragraph should be a detailed description of the image. What does the woman look like, what is her expression on her face, what does her sign say, how is she holding it, what is she wearing, what other people are in the image, what are they doing, where is the woman, what time of day is it, etc. Comment by LRC: The third paragraph should be an analysis of the image. What can you tell from the different details. What message does the woman’s protest communicate (her shirt, her sign, the fact that she is in the street, etc) Does her message make a logical argument or an appeal to emotions or both?

The source “why black live matters” is a speech from James Clapper in Morehouse College on November 4, 2016. The source explores the discrimination of the black people. Clapper as the director of national intelligence, United States discussed the aspects of discrimination of the black people in numerous ways. The useful role played by the black people in the development especially in the US intelligence is explained where the blacks are important in the political aspects in the United States. The lives of the blacks seem to be intertwined with politics in different ways with many people willing to ensure change is implemented. Comment by LRC: Specifically what roles does he say Black people have played in US Intelligence.

According to the article, there are many people who are willing to listen to the blacks, but some challenges seem to arise. For example, activists try to engage the political system they intend to change but fail to capitalize and compromise. The article is showing the efforts of the blacks to make sure that their voice is heard in different parts to claim then rights of the blacks. The blacks were discriminated in different ways despite their immense contributions in the political environment in the United States. The author of the article demonstrates the intention of the blacks to ensure that the discrimination they face is eliminated (Clapper, 55). The fight for the rights of blacks to be free from discrimination was successful where the integrity of the black people was to be restored. Comment by LRC: It sounds like he is being critical of the Black Lives Matter movement. Do you agree? It sounds like he is saying the problem is that they won’t compromise in order to get some of what they want. How do you think this relates to the woman in the picture? Can you see how Clapper would say that she is “not compromising” and therefore never going to achieve equality? You could use this idea to try on a different analysis of her protest and then later use an article from the White privilege book to show how, in fact it is white people who do not compromise. This is the kind of thing I am talking about when I say you need to use the articles as a lens to view the artifact.

The importance of the lives of the blacks is explored in the article where the blacks feel that their rights are compromised. The struggle for the rights of the black people has not been easy, but the blacks seem to have been determined to achieve their goals in the freedom fight. Through the eagerness of the black Americans to achieve their freedom from discrimination, many political changes are brought into action. The issues of racial conflict are shown in the article as the blacks are treated in a way that is not fair as compared to the other races. The whites are considered as the superior race with the blacks being ignored and their rights compromised (Clapper, 56). The author explores how the black Americans are not willing to let their rights to continue being compromised. As a result, the black Americans are ready to make sure that they tirelessly fight for their rights.

This article mainly demonstrates my central theme, which is “Black Live Matter”, through presenting how the black fight for their rights and freedom and how they try to gain equality. From the real experience from Clapper, he proposes that the black is supposed to enjoy same rights with the white. Comment by LRC: In this paragraph, instead of coming back to your “theme”, you should come back to your image and write about how the arguments of the article lead you to analyze your image in a new way.

“I don’t see color” is a book, which was published in Penn State University in 2015, talked about whiteness and racism. Bergo, Bettina and Tracey Nicholls are the authors of the book where the authors show the support to the black lives and the privileges of the whiteness. The arguments of the authors show that the contemporary conversations concerning the white privilege and the white supremacy are very far from being finished (Bergo and Tracey, 180). The book tries to bring together some recognized voices in the process of presenting critical whiteness studies. The authors offered creative multi-stylistic approach through making use of their live examples. The racism aspects in the book are being presented using conversations that can help in influencing social changes.

According to the book, the contemporary conversation concerning white privileges is based on the superiority of the race. The white seems to be favored in different political and social systems, unlike the black Americans. The white privilege brings an aspiration that is different from the current American reality. Failing to see color helps in criticizing the white studies literature as it discourages racism in numerous ways. The authors seem to examine the white privilege as distinguished contributors in sociology and political science (Bergo and Tracey, 210). The political aspects that are considered in the book are ranging from incisive post-colonial to the intellectual narratives concerning the aspects of racism in America. Comment by LRC: This is all very general and that makes it hard to apply the arguments to your analysis of the image. You might be better off choosing one article from the book and just working with those arguments.

There are some protests that, have been arranged so that the black people can claim their rights of equality, but almost all of them have had the same effect. The people who are demonstrating are beaten by the police who use strikers, canes, tear gas and who even shooting especially when they are unable to calm the situation. This is a very wrong way to handle demonstrators because there is the right to demonstrate and while they do so in a peaceful way, they should not be mishandled. Things are quite different when white people demonstrate, because they are not mishandled in any way, and the police may be following them only to make sure that they do not go against the law. Comment by LRC: Okay, now this is something you can use. What does it tell you about the woman’s message if she is willing to take her message to the streets even though she can not be sure that her right to protest will be protected, and in fact, participating in a protest might result in bodily harm … something that white people’s life experience does not require them to think about.

The authors do not see color as an important resource for reflecting on the white privilege and extension of critical extensions of the whiteness studies. According to the author, color is an essential multidisciplinary resource that can be used in addressing racism. The book has used a braided narrative approach that is compelling. The approach that the authors use is a broad mix of the disciplinary perspectives providing better insights concerning white privilege. As a result, the authors made significant contributions towards theorizing white privilege (Bergo and Tracey, 170). The authors of the book communicate the way racism affects democracy where the people democratic rights are influenced by the issue of race. The racial diversity in the United States seems to have great influence on the democracy environment. Comment by LRC: The information in this paragraph is not necessary in this kind of paper. It might be useful in your Book Review presentation. But this is not a book review and so it doesn’t belong here.

According to the book, the political climate in the United States has been affected by the racial issues. The ideas of different scholars concerning marginalization in literature are to examine the whiteness idea. While considering the racial background in the United States that is diverse, the authors provided their theoretical insight that is critically informed based on their narrative. Failing to recognize white and blacks can be a strategy towards eliminating the aspects of racism where people can be able to appreciate the differences. The authors seem to be encouraging people to put aside the racial differences to enhance democracy (Bergo and Tracey, 158). The political climate seems to be greatly influenced by the way the political systems perceive the different races.

Actually, this article helps me to support my thesis on the opposite aspect. By talking about how white people possess their privilege and the black have different treatment, the author advocates that racism should be eliminated. Black live matters the same with everyone else. Comment by LRC: Again, in this paragraph you should be coming back to your image and seeing how you can analyze it differently based on the insight from the book.

These two articles perfectly connect to each other because the book "I don't see color "show the privileges of whiteness and the speech from Clapper mainly talked about discrimination that the black received. From two opposite aspects, these two sources demonstrate how the black receive unequal treat. Therefore, by utilizing these two sources, my theme, which is "Black Lives Matter "and we should pay much attention to achieve equality between the black and the white.

I believe that in order to assist the black receive equal treatment with the white, staffs of the government , such as the police, should fundamentally eliminate discrimination towards the black. Then the idea of equality between the black and the white can be achieved.

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Unfortunately, you still do not understand what you are supposed to do in this assignment. As we discussed on Friday, your task here is to describe and analyze the woman’s protest in the photo. On Friday we talked about three details you could use as a place to start your analysis: her sign, her shirt, and the fact that she is in the middle of a crowded street. Then your job is to summarize your secondary sources and show how each sources changes or expands your analysis of the artifact.

Below I have copy and pasted the outline that I shared with everyone two weeks ago. This was the format I suggested you follow for this assignment. Your rough draft is due next Wednesday. I suggest that you use this outline to help re-structure your ideas and keep the focus on your artifact as you write your rough draft. I have written next to each number below, exactly what you should include in each paragraph.

Unfortunately, you have earned a D on this assignment because the only parts of the required components of the secondary source integration that you completed were the summaries of the secondary sources. If you are able to transform your SSI into a rough draft that contains each of the components in the outline below, I will adjust your SSI grade.

Please let me know if you have questions.

Secondary Source Integration Outline

1. First paragraph: Identification of your artifact/primary source (who created it, where it was first published, and on what date. You should include the circumstances of the image, for example, it was taken at a protest in New York City after a police officer killed Eric Garner.).

2. Second paragraph: A detailed description of your artifact (so that the reader can understand what you are analyzing without having to see or hear it. In your case, this should include the woman, that she is wearing, where she is standing, what does her face look like, who else is in the picture, what are they doing, etc.)

3. One or two paragraphs: Your initial analysis of the artifact (here you write about what her protest is communicating and how. You can focus on the words of her sign, her shirt, the fact that she is in the street, taking her message to people while they go about their business. You should write about whether her message makes a logical argument—logos—or appeals to the audience’s emotions—pathos—or both.)

4. One paragraph: Introduce your first secondary source (Include the author, title, publication source and date, and then summarize the author's claims. You do not need to critique the whole book. Just tell us the most important arguments of the book.)

5. One or two paragraphs: Use the first secondary source to analyze your artifact (How do the author's claims expand, change, complicate, or contradict your initial analysis of the picture of the woman?)

6. One paragraph: Introduce your second secondary source (Include the author, title, publication source and date, and then summarize the author's claims. Regarding the book “I don’t see color” it might be better to choose one article from the book that you can summarize more distinctly.)

7. One or two paragraphs: Use the second secondary source to analyze your artifact (How do the author's claims expand, change, complicate, or contradict your initial analysis of the picture of the woman?)

8. One paragraph: Put the secondary sources in conversation (Show how the two secondary sources relate to each other or contradict each other)

9. One or two paragraphs: Add yourself to the conversation (Use your own ideas to add, expand, complicate, ask questions, or form new conclusions about the picture of the woman based on the ways you have used your secondary sources to develop your analysis.)

Works cited

Bergo, Bettina and Tracey Nicholls. “I Don’t See Color”: Personal and Critical Perspectives on White Privilege.Penn State University Press. 2015

Clapper R. James, Why Black Lives Matter To U.S. Intelligence, 2016

Edwards, & Bradford, S. (2016). Black Lives Matter. ABDO, 2016.

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