peer response

-Anthony

1: I am fairly confident in my thesis statement towards the end of the introduction paragraph and feel that it sets the tone for what I have set for the audience going into my essay, do you feel otherwise or have any tips have read my essay?

2: I fear I might have touched on multiple topics in the same paragraph or strayed away from what I intended to be the main idea for individual paragraphs, do you understand what I meant having read the essay? Any advice or touch ups reccommended?

3: I fear I also may not be taking much from the book as I should be, after all my essay being based upon the books meaning/purpose and pulling outside sources can seem a bit hectic at times.

4: what did you think  overall? not enough of something and too much of another? feel free to let me know!

-Clarence

Q1. My whole essay is about trying to humanize the criminal stereotype BUT I tried to make be careful on not to make them look "good" but rather prove they are just human beings at the end of the day. I mostly focused on Baca's perspective while trying to critically think about his progression and gave my explanation of what outcomes of Baca's progress. For sure I have given quotes an re search and still need to add more.Does my essay's tone sound about right for what I am going?

Q2. I feel like my second paragraph is solid but is there anything I can add? Talking about the prison enviorment is tought since most of the tim is rather inhumane. I think I may have to add more but for sure do you think it sounds good, any critiques, or am I am not getting something right?

Q3. Baca for sure goes through like a lot of mental struggles. He not only like has family and lover problems, but I feel like he just trying to find out answers for himself throughout the book. Do you think I am hitting my target of a Prioner's Mental struggles towards Baca or is i something am I not talking about correctly?

Q4. Do you think talking about Baca's transformation is necessary to prove on that Baca is changed man and not the same man he was once was before and after prison? I feel like everyone goes through the change alot. In Baca's case, the prison motivates Baca to change so he can be a better prison for his future. Also should I add more research or explain the book quiotes more for this?

Q5. Feel free to use this Q5 as something  ihave missed or something you like to say since the previous were focused on each parts of the essay but use this question as like "Did I not add or miss a point in my essay?" or something releveant to critique my essay better.