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4_square.pptBased on the writing program of Judith and Evan Gould
Writing Prompts
- Writing Situation: Everyone has a fond memory of a special birthday.
- Think about a birthday that stood out among all the others.
- Directions for Writing: Write a paragraph/ essay telling about your favorite birthday.
Prepare the graphic organizer.
Fold your paper into 4 squares.
I will never forget my sixth birthday.
Fold the paper into four squares. Begin with one, well written topic sentence placed in a box in the center. This will become the topic sentence.
Topic Sentence
I will never forget my sixth birthday.
Add three supporting sentences (one in each box). The fourth box should be a feeling sentence that sums up the other three. All sentences should support the main topic in the center.
My grandmother threw me a surprise party.
My parents gave me a wonderful gift.
My friends and I went to the zoo.
It was the best birthday ever.
I will never forget my sixth birthday.
Add a detail in each box to tell more about the supporting sentence.
My grandmother threw me a surprise party.
My parents gave me a wonderful gift.
My friends and I went to the zoo.
It was the best birthday ever.
She baked my favorite chocolate fudge cake.
They surprised me with a golden retriever puppy.
We rode the elephants.
From the graphic organizer to the lined paper………..
I will never forget my sixth birthday. My grandmother threw me a surprise party. She baked my favorite chocolate fudge cake. My parents gave me a wonderful gift. They surprised me with a golden retriever puppy. My friends and I went to the zoo. We rode the elephants. It was the best birthday ever.
I will never forget my sixth birthday.
Add three details in each box to tell more about the supporting sentence.
My grandmother threw me a surprise party.
My parents gave me a wonderful gift.
My friends and I went to the zoo.
It was the best birthday ever.
favorite cake
tons of presents
exciting games
golden retriever
named Goldie
best friend
elephant ride
walked for miles
rode train
Again from the graphic organizer to the lined paper………..
I will never forget my sixth birthday. My grandmother threw me a surprise party. She baked my favorite chocolate fudge cake. I got tons of presents. We had such fun playing exciting games. My parents gave me a wonderful gift. They surprised me with a golden retriever puppy. I named her Goldie. She is my best friend today.My friends and I went to the zoo. We rode the elephants. The zoo was so large we walked for miles. Finally we gave up and rode the train. It was the best birthday ever.
I will never forget my sixth birthday.
My grandmother threw me a surprise party.
My parents gave me a wonderful gift.
My friends and I went to the zoo.
It was the best birthday ever.
favorite cake
tons of presents
exciting games
golden retriever
named Goldie
best friend
elephant ride
walked for miles
rode train
Early in the day,
After lunch,
Later,
Indeed,
Adding a transition word to each box will help the text to flow.
I will never forget my sixth birthday. Early in the day, my grandmother threw me a surprise party. She baked my favorite chocolate fudge cake. I got tons of presents. We had such fun playing exciting games.
After lunch, my parents gave me a wonderful gift. They surprised me with a golden retriever puppy. I named her Goldie. She is my best friend today.
Later, my friends and I went to the zoo. We rode the elephants. The zoo was so large we walked for miles. Finally we gave up and rode the train.
Indeed, It was the best birthday ever.
4 Square + 3 +T = 5 Paragraphs
Improving the first paragraph (introductory).
First Paragraph (Introduction)
- Topic Sentence
Center of 4 Square
- Use a hook
- Prepares reader
- Ties all squares together
On to the
essay…...
Getting older may be bad for some, but I will never forget my sixth birthday. The attention that I received from friends and family made me feel warm inside. It was a very special day for me.
Getting a year older may be bad for some, but I will never forget my sixth birthday. The attention that I received from friends and family made me feel warm inside. It was a very special day for me.
Early in the day, my grandmother threw me a surprise party. She baked my favorite chocolate fudge cake. I got tons of presents. We had such fun playing exciting games.
After lunch, my parents gave me a wonderful gift. They surprised me with a golden retriever puppy. I named her Goldie. She is my best friend today.
Later, my friends and I went to the zoo. We rode the elephants. The zoo was so large we walked for miles. Finally we gave up and rode the train.
Indeed, It was the best birthday ever.
Improving the Final Paragraph (summary)
- Wrap-up Sentence with a Transition
- Personal/Feeling Sentence, Question or Exclamation(closing with a punch!)
Getting a year older may be bad for some, but I will never forget my sixth birthday. The attention that I received from friends and family made me feel warm inside. It was a very special day for me.
Early in the day, my grandmother threw me a surprise party. She baked my favorite chocolate fudge cake. I got tons of presents. We had such fun playing exciting games.
After lunch, my parents gave me a wonderful gift. They surprised me with a golden retriever puppy. I named her Goldie. She is my best friend today.
Later, my friends and I went to the zoo. We rode the elephants. The zoo was so large we walked for miles. Finally we gave up and rode the train.
Indeed, it was the best birthday ever. The wonderful surprises from my family and friends will stay with me forever.
Writing Assessment Scoring Rubric
| Criteria | Score 1 Deficient | Score 2 Flawed | Score 3 Limited | Score 4 Competent | Score 5 Strong | Score 6 Outstanding |
| Organization | Incoherent | Weak organization | Inadequate organization | Adequately organized | Generally well organized | Well organized |
| Development | Undeveloped No details | Not developed Little or no relevant details | Not developed Does not explain develop key ideas | Developed Explains and illustrates some key ideas | Generally well developed Explains and illustrates most key ideas | Well developed Clearly explains and illustrates key ideas |
| Language Syntax | Limited or inappropriate word choice | Limited or inappropriate word choice | Limited or inappropriate word choice | Adequate facility in the use of language | Demonstrates some syntactic variety Facility in use of language | Strong Syntactic variety |
| Mechanics | Serious and persistent writing errors | Serious errors in mechanics, usage, sentence structure, or word choice | Accumulation of errors in mechanics, usage, sentence structure | Some errors in mechanics/ usage | Generally few errors in mechanics/ usage | Few errors in mechanics/ usage |
