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Running head: PROBLEMS AND SOLUTIONS TO DISCRIMINATION

PROBLEMS AND SOLUTIONS TO DISCRIMINATION

PROBLEM AND SOLUTION ESSAY TO DISCRIMINATION

Name: Waleed Almutairi

Instructor’s Name: Lal

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Discrimination is defined to as the unequal treatment and harassment that normally causes harm either in employment, contracts, occupations and unions. In our communities and the places of work, discrimination takes a lot of forms though it involves certain form of exclusion that is based on a bad judgment towards the gender of a person, religion, weight, someone’s nationality, age, sexual preference and many more. (Thesis statement?)

This discussion addresses all types of discrimination and it’s aimed at helping one to understand that he or she has an important role of ending discrimination among the people in the surrounding and work places (Scherer, 2016). It’s of importance that we should know how damaging discrimination does. There are reasons that explains why discrimination is really bad. The first reason explains that discrimination really hurts. The Ppeople who are discriminated at feels so painful whether the discriminations is overt or it’s subtle. The second reason explains that discrimination is degrading and inhuman. When anybody treats someone very differently mostly based on the gender, race or age, he or she deny the significance of who someone is as an individual. The awareness of the racial discrimination problem is the highest than ever been.

Effects of discrimination are majorly the social exclusion of an individual or as a group. This brings about lack of confidence and also the life invasion. The fight to eliminate discrimination needs much efforts. The discrimination cause can be strongly rooted from a constant copied stereotype. An example of a discrimination problem is in the salary differences among employers and employees (Fisanick, 2017). There are always salary differences across the race groups and gender. In the work places you find discrimination when an employer pays a less salary to a woman than the man yet they are doing the same work.

Other job areas you find that the white man always receives a huge salary compared to the black man. With time, both ethnic wage and the gender gaps are narrowing so gradually.

In the society there are some groups that are regarded to be less powerful compared to other groups. Those who normally do the discrimination are regarded by sociologists to as the dominant group while the ones being discriminated are regarded to as the minority groups. The dominant group has the greatest privilege, most power and also they hold the highest status in the society. The dominant group can be a small group but with power to discriminate the majority. The minority groups always see themselves as a collective discrimination objects. This means that they are seen to have powerless positions, always disadvantaged and socially excluded.

In America, discrimination is very common now than ever before. Although they have suppressed the racism, discrimination against the social status and the religion is very abundant as ever. Both religious and social status discrimination is regarded as bad but the age discrimination is invisible to the society as it seems to be (Lee, 2016). The poorest part on ageism is that it can’t be changed just like the race and this makes one get stuck on it. There are majority of elder people who are not given medication because of the age advance and the same happens to the younger people who are denied the same human rights since the dominate age group has refused to have them.

These discrimination problems should be worked upon in order to eliminate them in the society and people will feel to be in the same class once it is solved. The problems associated with discrimination in the society reflects the religion, race and also the disable discrimination. Race discrimination is a major reason as to why people start violence. This is easy seen as an evidence in the Hollywood movies whereby the back people fight with the white people always since they are being discriminated. Religion discrimination on the other hand can really endanger the peace of the world. Different religion have their god differently and there is a huge number of the believers in each religion. A world war can easily be caused once the religion differences break out bringing up violence. Discrimination is all about elimination and relegation and conveys effectively the obvious message on differentness of victim humiliation and inferiority.

However, one can eliminate discrimination even at the best. The societies are looking for legislation and even education to in order to reduce discrimination. Everyone can take the role of just doing anything to eliminate discrimination. Putting into practice the simple acts each day will assist you in strengthening your skills and intervene when need arises. Meanwhile there are number of solutions that would help us eliminate the discrimination both in the society and also at the work places (Stewart, Larsen, & Wynne, 2016). Identifying what you most believe in one of the solutions. One should know where his or her belief originate from and how importance they are to you, your friends or your family. We should challenge ourselves and try meeting new people, attempt another shop or a restaurant. Don’t get used to the same places you know because of the same skin color. Try to expand your world by expanding the world view. We should try to promote dialogue by asking new questions and avoid being engaged to diatribes. Recognizing what has already been done as not needed for now.

Ask questions like how should it be done this way? We should also learn to listen and always seek to understand the other perspectives even before we judge things as strange or wrong. Trying to understand beliefs of somebody from the political parties or faith will also solve the discrimination problem. Practicing inclusion and recognize whether there is a room for every voice in the staff meetings. Include every one and listen to the teens keenly, ask the elderly foe more advices. Make sure you have a friend from another tribe or religion.

Speaking up against injustice is an important way of solving discrimination. Injustice usually happens in other states or countries but still happens in our own backyards we should use our voices to speak up the problem whether it’s environmental, racial, social or even economic. Another solution to discrimination is having the courage to take actions. Not just thinking about the equality inclusion or justice we should take the actions and make them reality. We should also promote change by changing our minds first and see what is happening. Change will start with yourself then go ahead and advice the others to change. Discrimination will be eliminated if we become intentional and do what is important to us as well as saying what is important (Clarke, 2017). Making intentional choices will end the discrimination in the societies.

We should take the responsibilities to support our communities and make them free from discrimination by treating each individual with respect and also dignity. Work hard in both schools and communities to have leaders who will bring change to the communities. Through

Donations of talents, sacrificing time and providing financial support will enable the youths and adults have opportunities to change their lives.

Learning to stand up for yourself and letting others know that their actions and words are affecting you and the ones you normally care about. Always learn to fight for your rights and make people understand that a certain problem exists. Always be organized and reach out, don’t just do things alone. You need people to help you work together and the togetherness will bring peace within the community. Discrimination will come to end when people with the same situation unite together share their stories and make their voices be heard. This will also help obtain some resources and also the social support that we always need in order to survive.

Overall,

It is good that you have attempted to write a good essay. I appreciate the efforts you have made towards writing a good essay. However, you have written on too general topic. If I were you I would select a particular topic and write on that. For the further improvement, I’d like to give the following suggestions.

1. As mentioned above you have not written thesis statement.

2. Follow the given format.

a. Introductory paragraph

b. Body paragraph 2: justification on why that problem you are talking about is a real problem to be addressed. Usually, I expect you to write on the negative effects of the problem.

c. Paragraph 3: Main solution and its justification how it really resolves the problem.

d. Paragraph 4: Alternative solution and justify why that solution does not work towards the end of the paragraph.

e. Conclusion:

3. Write concluding paragraph.

4. Make sure that you have cited the sources appropriately. Mention which page or pages did you read and got the ideas you have mentioned.

5. Make a list of references as per APA. You have not written the place of publication and publisher.

References Clarke, L. (2017). Discrimination. London: Institute of Personnel and Development. Fisanick, C. (2017). Discrimination. Farmington Hills: Greenhaven Press. Lee, G. (2016). Discrimination. Vero Beach, Fla: Rourke. Scherer, L. S. (2016). Discrimination . Detroit: Greenhaven Press. Stewart, G. B., Larsen, A., & Wynne, E. (2016). Discrimination. New York: Crestwood House.

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