Research Paper about youth suicide

Notes for Claim Writing Success

1. Comments on Titles:

Sample #1: chose strong language to show writer’s claim; first part grabs attention, second part gets focused

Sample #2: Please Help! Grabs the reader on an emotional level—got attention—the beginning part wasn’t as strong!!

Too fake! Not specific enough—(turned attention away) too blunt! Gives away too much!—

Sample #3: attention grabbing—polarizing language, strong words—can see both sides—

Critique: include “Formation” or not? Too much? Too litte?

Is it too exaggerated? Overly done? Not serious enough?

2. What goes in the first paragraph?

b. what worked?

Introduces the issue

Using some data? Used a quote? Create a sense of urgency or importance=gives justification, gives context

How is this different than Sec 3 (background)?

In claim—give a quick glimpse of the issue—

Sample 3—clear description of problem-

Quote? Expert echoes your statement so it doesn’t sound like you are making it up

Why not use it? Summarize

Sample 1 quote –early? Suspicious

In Sec 3 dig into the details more

c. what didn’t?

what didn’t work

MLA incorrect

Sample #2—too general---too broad!

3. What goes in the second paragraph?

MAP:

All major points of the paper (introduce or touch on every required section)

--Section 2—Suvin and short story

Map out the required sections of this paper (all your big moves!)

--solution (section 6)

Taking a stand –say what you argue and why it matters! Last two sentence of paragraph 2

Use first person? To use or not to use?

Feel more comfortable –easy to use commanding words

Sounding confident

Assert yourself into your argument—easier to sound confident

Map—chronological—follow the order of the paper!!

b. what worked?

c. what didn’t?

this is not project proposal writing

Is it specific? Controversial?

Map? What does that mean??

Stakes?