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Running head: MILITARY TO CIVILIAN LIFE 1

How to transition from Military to Civilian Living: Rough Draft

Tianna Lindsey

ENG122: English Composition II

Instructor Barbara Green

March 13, 2016

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Great title page. [Barbara

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MILITARY TO CIVILIAN LIFE 2

How to transition from military to civilian living: Rough Draft

Returning to civilian life presents new opportunities as well as challenges for veterans.

Many veterans look forward to life after the military, this allows them to be able to spend more

time with family and friends and no longer worry about military structure or being deployed. At

the same time, this transition will lead to a lot of changes both positive and negative. Individuals

who are undergoing separation from the military have been known to experience a variety of

feelings, including: anxiety, frustration, fear, and loss. A strategy for combating these difficult

feelings is through the provision of education and information. The transition period between the

two is can a daunting task, however it is a task that can be accomplished if planned and thought

out properly.

Proper planning in a soldier’s life will increase the likelihood of a smoother transition

from military service to civilian life. Veterans need to make sure to gather their thoughts and

have suitable plans before moving forward (Collins, 2015). By proper planning, service member

should not wait until 30 days from separation or retirement before starting the military to civilian

transition process. Many veterans and soldiers’ getting to exit the military should be seeking out

the services of agencies such as the VA, county-operated veteran services, and traditional

veterans service organizations, theses services can be extremely helpful to veterans who are

seeking to transition out of the military and into a successful civilian life. Preparing for

retirement should begin way before the decision is made to retire. According to US Fed News

Services (2011) "Research has shown that the more job assistance services a person receives, the

higher that person's starting salary will be and the faster that person will obtain meaningful

employment”. This is the reason why proper planning is so necessary in ones a life changing

event.

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1. The transition period

between the two is can a

daunting task, however it is

a task that can be

accomplished if planned

and thought

out properly.

This last sentence of the intro

paragraph should be your

three-point thesis and state

the argument the essay will

focus on as well as preview

the three main points you will

use to prove said argument.

[Barbara Green]

2. Proper planning in a

soldier’s life will increase

the likelihood of a smoother

transition

from military service to

civilian life.

This should be the topic

sentence for the first point

from the thesis. In this

paragraph, I would work to

set up main point #1.

Remember to always start a

topic sentence with a

transition. [Barbara Green]

3. According to US Fed

News

Services (2011)

Good job providing a signal

phrase for this quote.

[Barbara Green]

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Next, service members need to make sure to research employment opportunities look at

unemployment rates, make sure to also develop a family budget and begin to save money before

the transition. Other things soldiers exiting out of the military should consider is doing research

on geographical locations, health care facilities, life insurance options, educational benefits, and

overall family needs. By planning it helps exiting service members to map out what to expect,

so they aren’t caught off guard when it’s time to complete the transition from soldier to civilian.

According to the landmark study conducted by Prudential, nearly 70 percent of veterans say their

biggest challenge is finding employment after the service.

Serving in the military can be difficult, demanding and dangerous, but returning to the

civilian life also poses challenges for the men and women who have serves in the armed forces

because employment after transitioning from the military is the greatest challenge when

returning to civilian life. Proper planning, taking time to enjoy family and friends, being patient

with one’s self will help to avoid frustration from overly high expectations. Exiting service

members should be sure to reach out to support that support soldiers exiting the military like,

Transition Assistance Program (TAP).

In conclusion, many soldiers may look at transitioning out of the military as an easy

experience. A lot of soldiers have spent half their lives in the service and are ready for a new

lease on life, however, proper planning must be done to be successful outside the military.

Civilian life is a lot different and harder than some aspects of the military life. Military gives

soldiers a place to live, food, clothing, a job, friends and comprehensive health care. The military

doesn’t give soldiers a lot of freedom or choices. Once a service member leaves the military that

story is revised, so proper planning is a must for a service member to be successful.

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1. Next, service members

need to make sure to

research employment

opportunities look at

unemployment rates, make

sure to also develop a

family budget and begin to

save money before the

transition.

I'm seeing great topic

sentence potential with this

and the last paragraph. Make

sure you have a three-point

thesis as the last sentence of

the intro that sets up what

these topic sentences are

presenting so that the reader

has a heads up. [Barbara

Green]

2. Serving

Opposing point? [Barbara

Green]

3. (TAP).

I recommend you develop at

least one sub-point for each

main point as well as an

opposing point to help

develop your argument and

meet word count requirement

for the final. [Barbara Green]

4. many soldiers may look

at transitioning out of the

military as an easy

experience.

This should be a restatement

of your thesis statement and

should begin with a

concluding transition.

[Barbara Green]

5. successful.

This essay is short of the

required word count

minimum. Remember that

word count ONLY applies to

the essay itself and does not

include anything on the title

page or the references page.

[Barbara Green]

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References

MILITARY TO CIVILIAN: TRANSITION ASSISTANCE PROGRAM MAKES SMOOTH

TRANSITION. (2011, Jan 03). US Fed News Service, Including US State News Retrieved

from https://search.proquest.com/docview/82207871

Collins, A. (2015). 5 Ways to make a smooth transition from military to civilian life.

Employment and Transition, V1(I#), pp1–pp3. Expertparent.com

Moore, B. A. (2012). Prepare for transition to civilian life. Air Force Times, , 10. Retrieved from

https://search.proquest.com/docview/940848095?accountid=32521

Chilton, J. (2013, Nov 11). Veterans face challenges transitioning to corporate world. McClatchy -

Tribune Business News Retrieved from https://search.proquest.com/docview/1449810930?

accountid=32521

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1. References

You are on the right track, but

I see issues. Please visit the

Ashford Writing Center,

located at

https://awc.ashford/edu.

Utilize ‘Writing Resources’,

within the main toolbar, to find

help in this area. [Barbara

Green]