revise psychology paper using feedback I provide

Criteria	Points Possible	Points Earned	Comments
Content	Intro of a relevant specific thesis/focus & why important	10	5	Need thesis
	Clear link from Research finding 1 to specific thesis/focus	5	0	Need thesis
	Clear link from Research finding 2 to specific thesis/focus	5	0
	Clear link from false news example 1 to specific thesis/focus	5	0
	Clear link from false news example 2 to specific thesis/focus	5	0
	Concluding summary integrates evidence & examples, addresses specific thesis/focus, & elaborates	10	5	Because no thesis it didn't correct fully
Mechanics	Organization of paper (clear flow, logic)	5	4
	APA style (title page, citations, & reference list)	5	4

Additional Comments: You were clear with description, but considering you didn't have a thesis. It wasn't be organized. Clearly state your argument in intro and refer to it throughout the paper. Also, really check APA errors! This paper has a lot of potential, be sure to follow my feedback.

Running Head: BIAS AND FALSE NEWS

Bias and False News were your titles would be. For APA don't split up into separate sections. Rewrite without section titles.

Page 3 (New page 4), first paragraph, Medically defined, mental scotoma is a figurative blind spot in a person’s psychological awareness, the patient being unable to agin insight into and to understand his mental problems.” (Farlex, 2012) (Why is here quotation mark?)

Conclusion: Try to expand by a few sentences elaborating some evidence you toward(?) that got you to this point.

Reference: Need to be double-spaced; doesn't need indentation, needs hanging indent