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Civil Wars

I have chosen the topic because civil wars are a major challenge to states today. States fight each other because of authority not to talk of citizens fighting amongst themselves because of resources. Civil wars had stirred by greed for the wealth of struggle for leadership. The effect of civil wars is significant for they paralyze fully the activities of the country. For instance, children are unable to attend schools, the property is destroyed and a lot of people lose their lives. (Which primary sources will you use for your analysis? Tell you reader in the opening paragraph?)

The topic relates to the primary sources in the sense that the primary sources state how a leader by the name of Dumnorix because he had broken the cord and married a wife from Orgetorix; he assumes that he has the power to rule over the territory (Julius Caesar, the Gallic wars 3). Dumnorix collaborates with other leaders such as Helvettii in taking control over the town and takes some individuals as hostages. Helvettii engaged in battles to conquer the Carturiges and the Graioceli and the Caturiges in a fierce battle. The main aim of the battle is to ravage the fertile land from the weak territories. In the second primary source, it indicates that the Romans had power as compared to the Barbarians and thus they were able to attack the barbarians and cause terror in the country (Titus Livius, The History of Rome, 37). (How is this "civil" war thought?)

The Gauls were angry about the hostility of the Romans against human law. Thus, they gathered their arms and prepared for a fight. The Gauls were not as tough as the Romans and thus they lost the fight.

Compare and Contrast

Both the two sources are giving information on the rise of civil wars in Rome. They are both elaborative about the communities that were involved in the wars. It is also certain that both sources state common reasons as of the factors that triggered war. In both of the sources, the war was triggered by the struggle to have power over the territories and the need to occupy fertile lands for farming. (Give examples from the texts to support this point.)

The contrasting points are on the specific leaders that led the fights between the states. Caesar as a leader is not mentioned in both of the primary sources. Caesar is a major influence to the fights in one primary source that was written by Julius Caesar. The Gauls are associated in both of the primary sources as those that are oppressed by the Romans. The other difference is the fact that Julius mentions the killings of the armed men that take place at the Tiber River but Titus just mention Caesar passing through Tiber city but he does not write about the lives that are lost at the river. (What are some big differences in the texts, though? For example, are both wars taking place on the same territory? Who is the aggressor in each case?)

Impact of the Similarities and differences in the Primary sources to Readers

The similarities depict that civil wars are characterized with the same effects to the affected individuals. Civil wars are brought about by individuals that do not care about other people but themselves. Civil wars lead to death and massive migrations to safer zones. When civil wars take place there is no room for development. I would say that if the similarities are the same then it seems that the points raised can be relied upon . (This is compelling, but you need to relate it to the events being discussed)

The similarities also make the primary sources to be viewed as valid by the readers.

The differences that arise make it difficult for the reader to identify which amongst the authors is saying the truth. Primary sources that have extreme differences lose the confidence of the readers and the readers and the readers thus need to research more in order to elaborate on the controversial points. In addition, the differences make the civil war topic to indicate that there were differences in the war information was written and that the information may be subject to biases or lack of sufficient data.

Historical Question

What were taken for effects of the civil wars in Rome? (Can you answer this with the texts in question?)

The civil wars that were experienced in Rome led to a fall back in the rate of development in that when people were made to evade their home, it was made clear that they could not continue with their day to day activities. Individuals had to go to other safe zones to start a living there.

The other problem that was associated with civil wars was the issue of loss of life. The property was also lost due to the frequent fires that were set by the armies on targeted communities (Boyce, 2013). During the wars, many individuals were killed the majority of them being the soldiers that were in tea army. Women and children were left without any means to feed their families. Emotional torture and poverty struck a majority of the affected families.

Conversely, there was no stable leadership in the affected areas because if the issue of wars. Leaders were always faced with the challenge of settling the wars. Leaders were unable to stabilize their governance and thus they were no changes in terms of political and economic diversity. Leaders that were stable were only the dictators that had acquired power and the influence to rule over the territories.

Brutality and oppression were experienced by women and children that were victims. After civil wars, the energetic men and women were taken as hostages and they were made to work for their hosts (Boyce, 2013). Hostages was subject to forced labor that had poor pay. Civil wars made people be poorer and victims of discrimination. Innocent individuals were killed in the battles. It is certain that the population of the countries were at stake when people were killed every now. In addition, individuals migrated to safer areas and thus their native lands were sparsely populated.

References

Caesar, J. The Gallic wars

Boyce, J. K. (2013). Investing in peace: Aid and conditionality after civil wars (No. 351).

Routledge.

Livius, T.The history of Rome. London: John Childs and Sons