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Ho Yuen Leung

Dr. Nivens

ENGL 2113-X10

2 November 2016

Greek Organization Are Good for Students

In the past, partying was never among the reasons for joining sororities and fraternities.

Today, these sororities and fraternities are making the headlines for the wrong reasons

(Katherine Schulten (2014). Since Greek life is associated with reckless partying, vandalism,

drinking, bullying and fighting, the idea that fraternities are of any good is laughable. There are

many stereotypes that associate fraternities and sororities with all crimes that are witnessed in

universities today. Frats and sororities are accused of covering up dealing drugs, sexual assaults

and ruining the integrity of homework, tests and exams. These actions are individual and not

advocated by Greek life. A university is a place where unity in diversity should be encouraged.

As thus, making friends should be at the core of this. Joining Greek life is invaluable to those

who join it with a positive mentality. Frats and sororities give its members a chance to impact

other people’s lives positively through philanthropic activities. It also gives the members a

priceless chance to sharpen their leadership skills. It is unfortunate the frats have forgotten the

initial goal of Greek life. Greek organizations were meant to be good for everyone and they only

need to be reformed. I strongly believe that Greek organizations should not be banned from

college campuses.

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Greek organizations are committed to helping the community through philanthropic

activities. Generally, Greek organizations benefit the community in many ways. For instance, the

sororities and frats encourages positivity in students at the unit or in society. Most frats are

committed to giving back to the society through volunteering activities, such as awareness walks,

blood donations, and support of the less fortunate members of the society. Many Greek sororities

and frats come up with useful service projects, which benefit not only the members, but also

nonmembers. It might be one of the most hidden aspects of Greek organizations, but is very

significant. Time and again, sororities and fraternities hit the headlines for hazing, vandalizing,

and drinking, but also for good initiatives such as fundraisers and philanthropy endeavors. Greek

organizations on campuses usually include a priceless culture of philanthropy and selfless

service. Nevertheless, the degree of involvement of Greek organizations in these activities varies

from chapter to chapter and from one organization to another. Notably, various university

chapters are seriously involved in volunteer projects dedicated to community service or

philanthropic ventures (Bowen, et al, 2011). Many organizations dedicate leadership positions to

community service and philanthropy endeavors since they form the core of Greek life. Many

Greek organizations’ chapters raise a lot of money to be used in various charity initiatives of

their choice. Indoctrinating the precious value of volunteer community service and philanthropy

in young university students is important. It helps create a crop of young graduates who value

service to the community and nourishes a strong passion of giving back to the society in many

useful ways.

Greek organizations increase social and leadership skills. Sororities and fraternities give

its members significant meaningful and beneficial learning experiences, which can never be

taught in the university curriculum. Greek organizations provide endless leadership opportunities

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to its members, which prepares them for their life after campus. To this effect most of its

members graduate as young elites who believe in pleasure, prestige, and the power derived from

leadership. Most of the U.S. presidents have been members of Greek organizations and no

wonder they made it in politics and leadership. In these frats, many students are given the chance

to improve their leadership and interpersonal or rather brotherhood skills (Nicole, 2012).

In conclusion, it can be seen that fraternities are not the origin of irresponsible behavior,

sexual assault, alcoholism and gender inequality. These are mere social constructs which are

taught by the society and thus have become ingrained even in university students. It may be easy

to associate most campus wickedness to sororities and frats but banning Greek organizations

would definitely not end these issues. They will simply be transferred to another consequential

medium. Banning Greek organizations will deprive the society and the students the benefits

associated with these organizations. Social and leadership skills, voluntary community service

and philanthropy endeavors will need to be sacrificed if Greek organizations were to be banned.

DeSantis cites that reforming the fraternities and sororities is not only possible but also necessary

but not banning them (2007). Fraternities should not be banned because they help the society as

well as the young members of these important organizations.

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References

Bowen, G., Burton, C., Cooper, C., Cruz, L., McFadden, A., Reich, C., & Wargo, M. (2011).

Listening to the Voices of Today's Undergraduates: Implications for Teaching and

Learning. Journal of the Scholarship of Teaching and Learning, 11(3), 21-33.

http://josotl.indiana.edu/article/viewFile/1825/1822. Accessed 31 Oct 2016

DeSantis, A. (2007). Inside Greek U.: Fraternities, sororities, and the pursuit of pleasure,

power, and prestige. University Press of Kentucky.

Katherine Schulten (2014). Should Colleges Ban Fraternities? Retrieved from

http://learning.blogs.nytimes.com/2014/03/13/should-colleges-ban-fraternities/?_r=0.

Accessed 31 Oct 2016

Nicole Glass (2012). Examining the benefits of Greek Life.

http://college.usatoday.com/2012/05/08/examining-the-benefits-of-greek-life/. Accessed

31 Oct 2016

Essay Grading Guidelines

Grading Criteria for Essay Assignments Assignment

Possible Points Earned Points

W2 W3 W4 W5 Plagiarism and the use of quotations All text copied from another source must be placed in quotation marks and correctly cited and referenced. If you copy text without putting that text in quotation marks, you will receive a zero for the essay. If this happens twice in the course, you will receive an F for the course. If you submit an essay that previously was submitted by another student, you will receive an F for the course.

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Formatting Document has the following: • header: last name and page number, aligned to right • first page identifying information: your full name, my name, class/section, date • title that reflects the topic and your thesis • file name: last name followed by assignment # (e.g., Smith W2) • file saved as Word Document

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Introductory paragraph The first paragraph in the essay introduces the reader to the essay topic and is at least 7-‐ 10 sentences in length. At the end of the introductory paragraph, the thesis is stated and underlined. (Do not start the introductory paragraph with your thesis.) The thesis takes a clear stand on the assigned topic. The amount of quoted text in the paragraph does not exceed 20% of the text.

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Two body paragraphs Each body paragraph begins with an underlined topic sentence. Each topic sentence is a clear reason in support of the thesis that you underlined in the introductory paragraph. (Thesis and topic sentences are not the same.) Each topic sentence is followed by a paragraph that is at least 7-‐10 sentences in length. The paragraph includes explanations, examples, paraphrases, and quotes from your readings that support the reason underlined as the topic sentence. At least 1 reputable source is cited in each body paragraph (i.e., you do not only use personal experience or knowledge). The amount of quoted text in any paragraph does not exceed 20% of the text. The body paragraphs offer a thorough analysis of the issue. The body paragraphs end with a tie back, or reference, to the topic sentence of the paragraph and/or the thesis.

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Concluding paragraph The final paragraph of your essay wraps up—or brings to a close—the essay and your argument. No new reasons are introduced or developed in the conclusion. The concluding paragraph is at least 5-‐7 sentences in length. The amount of quoted text in the paragraph does not exceed 20% of the text.

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Sentences The essay uses complete sentences that are organized into standard patterns.

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Mechanics The essay demonstrates adherence to Standard Written American English.

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References A minimum of 2 authoritative, credible online sources are used to support your argument, at least 1 source in each body paragraph. Each quote is introduced in the text: you let the reader know in advance whom you are quoting and the context of the source. All sources are correctly cited in the text using parenthetical citations where needed, and each source is included in a Works Cited or Reference section at the end of the document, following either MLA or APA style guidelines (see course textbook). Sources are not cited in the paper with an Internet addresses (URLs), nor is a URL used as the only reference information at the end of the document.

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Total Overall your body paragraphs are strong. Be sure it is clear what information is coming from sources and what information is coming from your own

commentary and reasoning.

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