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Final Draft of Writing Project 1: Summary and Response - Submission 1

Shen Wang

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Dear Professor Sheila McDermott-Sipe,

My main objective of writing this draft is to inform the audience about the some of the challenges that face our higher education system. 1 MY INTENDED AUDIENCES INCLUDE THE PEERS, MY PROFESSOR, THE OTHER STAKEHOLDERS SUCH AS THE SOCIETY AND PARENTS. There are certain issues that I changed in the paper to improve the content. Some of the revisions that I made to improve my document include: editing my work and correcting sentence structures as well as create a precise definition to capture attention of the reader. 1 THE FEEDBACK I RECEIVED FROM PEERS WAS ON THE ISSUE OF POOR SENTENCE STRUCTURE. I used this feedback to shorten my sentences to ensure they were clear. 1 THIS REVISION IMPROVED MY DRAFT IN THAT IT WAS EASY TO UNDERSTAND, AND THE SENTENCES BECAME BRIEF, CLEAR AND DIRECT TO THE POINT. The challenge I encountered while trying to revise the draft was locating all mistakes as advised by peers- I solved that challenge through scanning over pointed areas.

Shen Wang EGL111 Professor Sheila McDermott-Sipe 10/29/16 Does the internet make you dumber?

In the current world, it is not very common for the learners to do anything without the use of internet. 2 VARIOUS STUDIES INDICATE THAT MOST PEOPLE WHO HAPPEN TO READ TEXT STUDDED WITH LINKS, UNDERSTAND VERY LITTLE AS COMPARED TO THOSE WHO READ OUTDATED LINEAR TEXT. 3 SOME OF THE PEOPLE WHO WATCH THE BUSY MULTIMEDIA PERFORMANCES RECALL LESS THAN THOSE THAN THE ONES WHO TAKE IN INFO IN A MORE FOCUSED AND SEDATE MANNER (CARR 1). 2 PERSONS WHO ARE CONSTANTLY DISTRACTED BY THE ALERTS, EMAILS AS WELL AS OTHER MESSAGES COMPREHEND LITTLE AS COMPARED TO THOSE WHO ARE ABLE TO CONCENTRATE. 4 ON THE OTHER HAND PEOPLE WHO JUGGLE WITH SEVERAL TASKS ARE LESS IMAGINATIVE AS WELL AS LESS PRODUCTIVE AS COMPARED TO THOSE WHO DO ONE THING AT A TIME. 1 THE MAIN OBJECTIVE OF THIS ARTICLE WAS TO DEMONSTRATE THE IMPACTS OF USING INTERNET IN PEOPLE’S LIFE. IT CAN BE SUMMED UP THAT THE COMMON STRAND OF THE CHALLENGES OF IS THE DIVIDED ATTENTION.

Does the internet make you dumber?” is an article that accounts for various issues related to the internet and its impacts to the general society. The article starts by the author accounting for the richness of people’s thoughts, memories as well as personalities on people’s capability to concentrate the mind and maintain the focus. The author explains that only when people pay attention to new information are they able to relate it to systematic and meaningfully with skills already well created in the memory (Carr 1). Such relations are significant to mastering some of the complicated ideas.

The author states that “people are continuously interrupted and distracted, as the y concentrate online, their brains are not able to forge strong as well as expansive links that provide distinctiveness and depth to people’s thinking” (Carr 1). 2 MOST PEOPLE BECOME JUST A SIGNAL PROCESSING UNITS, HASTILY DIRECTING BITS OF INFORMATION INTO AND THEN OUT OF SHORT-TERM MEMORY. VARIOUS RESEARCHES IN THE ARTICLE SHOW THAT PARTICULAR TASKS SUCH AS PLAYING VIDEO GAMES CAN IMPROVE VISUAL SKILLS, IMPROVING SPEED AT WHICH PERSONS CAN CHANGE THEIR FOCUS AMONG THE IMAGES AS WELL AS ICONS ON SCREENS. THE OTHER RESEARCH DISCOVERED THAT SUCH FAST CHANGE IN FOCUS, EVEN IF CARRIED OUT ADEPTLY, RESULT IN MORE AUTOMATIC THINKING AND LESS RIGOROUS (SHIRKY 1).

The experiment which was carried out at Cornell University indicates that 50 percent of the learners were permitted to use the internet connected computers during lecture, whereas the others had to keep their computers closed. The students who browsed the website did much worse on the following test of how well they captured the content. Though it is hardly surprising that surfing on web would confuse the learners, it must be cautioned to schools that wiring their classrooms in the hope of enhancing their learning (Carr 1).

5 FROM THE INFORMATION, GREENFIELD SUMMARIZED THAT “EACH MEDIUM IMPROVES SOME COGNITIVE SKILLS AT THE EXPENSE OF ANOTHER.” THE AUTHOR STATES THAT THE INCREASING CONCERN OF THE SCREEN BASED MEDIA HAS REINFORCED VISUAL SPATIAL INTELLIGENCE, WHICH CAN ENHANCE THE CAPABILITY TO CARRY OUT TASKS THAT REQUIRE KEEPING TRACK OF SEVERAL SIMULTANEOUS SIGNALS SUCH AS AIR TRAFFIC CONTROLS. 2 IN THE OTHER EXPERIMENT, A RESEARCH CONDUCTED BETWEEN INTERACTIVE MEDIA LAB AND HUMANS, A TEAM OF INVESTIGATORS GAVE COGNITIVE TESTS TO 49 PERSONS WHO DO NUMEROUS MULTITASKING AND 52 PERSONS WHO MULTITASK LESS FREQUENTLY (CARR 1). The highly multitaskers achieved poor results on all teats. The distracted, had little attention and they were less capable of distinguishing significant information from trivial once.

1 PERSONALLY, I DID CARED SO MUCH FOR THIS ARTICLE, AND THE POINT THE AUTHOR WAS TRYING TO MAKE WAS DONE WITH SIGNIFICANT SUCCESS. The author’s style of writing involves the usage of quotes and simple vocabularies. When I read this article, that quote immediately came to mind. 1 CARR’S STYLE IS AUTHENTIC AND I GOT A STRONG IMPRESSION THAT IT IS DELIBERATELY CLEAR THAT THIS PERSON HAS VAST INFORMATION. I FOUND THE STORY TO BE INCREDIBLY ORIGINAL. The article has explained some of the negative effects that the current society is undergoing in the name of internet. 1 THIS ARTICLE READ LIKE THE AUTHOR WANTED THE READER TO UNDERSTAND VIVIDLY OF THE CHALLENGES OF USING INTERNET IN LECTURE AND ITS NEGATIVE IMPACTS.

IN CONCLUSION, THE ARTICLE “DOES THE INTERNET MAKE YOU DUMBER” HAS A VERY VALID POINT THAT IT IS TRYING TO MAKE. I PERSONALLY WOULD RECOMMEND THIS STORY TO SEVERAL OTHER READERS. THE ARTICLE IS VERY EASY TO FOLLOW AND IS EXTREMELY ORIGINAL. THE POINTS ARE WELL LAID DOWN WITH EXPERIMENTS WHICH WERE DONE PREVIOUSLY. IT IS IN MY VIEW THAT MORALS THAT THIS ARTICLE IS TRYING TO TEACH WERE DONE WITH SIGNIFICANT SUCCESS.

6 WORKS CITED CARR, NICHOLAS. 2 "DOES THE INTERNET MAKE YOU DUMBER?" 7 5 JUNE 2010. The was stret Journal. 3 21 OCTOBER 2016 <HTTP://WWW.WSJ.COM/NEWS/ARTICLES/SB10001424052748704025304575284981644790098>

Shirky, C. 2 "DOES THE INTERNET MAKE YOU DUMBER." WALL STREET JOURNAL 4 (2010).

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