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ctw_project.ppt

Thesis Statement

A single sentence: keep focused on one point/idea, avoid conjunctions (and, because)

 Outsourcing to Zambia would be beneficial for a foreign company and it would help the country.

 Outsourcing to Zambia would be beneficial for a foreign company.

 Malaysia is ripe for foreign direct investment because its strong economy and well educated workforce.

 Malaysia is ripe for foreign direct investment.

A single declarative sentence: make a statement rather than asking a question

 Is Denmark an ideal country for importing business?

 Denmark is an ideal country for importing business.

Thesis Statement

Be strong: try to convince your readers

 Foreign direct investment could lead to economic growth in Spain.

 Spain is an attractive country for FDI.

Provide completed and precise sentences: specify how to do business (off-shoring, importing/exporting, licensing, FDI, franchising, etc.)

 The United Republic of Tanzania is an alluring market.

 It is beneficial to do business in Turkey.

International Business perspective

Structure

Step 1: Come up with an idea in general

Step 2: Make an outline:

Country Background
Thesis statement, 3 reasons supporting the statement
3 reasons: statement sentence for each reason (summarizing main idea of each paragraph)
Conclusion: repeat thesis statement and 3 reasons

Step 3: Fill in the blank

Reasons

Start with a statement sentence in each paragraph
Always relate your reasons to the main point
Foreign Trade Agreements: specify their names and talk about what these agreements offer to support your main point
Economically doing well: numbers to support your reason (employment rate, growth rate, etc.)
Avoid providing 2 or more reasons in one paragraph
Feel free to separate one reason into several paragraphs if enough evidence is provided

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