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Thesis: Lesbians and gays are denied equal rights and are taken for granted by other citizens who do not uphold the same personality and values as them RS Rhonda Sullivan awkward

I. The rights of people with different sexual orientations have been infringed and it is time that they should be heard and their rights respected.

A. People believe in equal rights and so do lesbians and gays believe. Although many people are against same-sex marriage, it is a constitutional and a civil right that should be granted to individuals.

B. Same-sex couples are responsible just like any other normal parent. Research has shown that family relationship is critical more than family structures.

C. Legalizing same-same marriage is opposed on the grounds that it would lead to financial implications.

II. The fact that same-same couples are discriminated and denied social benefits makes them feel that the government is not doing enough.

A. Same-sex couple have no right to claim social benefits and are discriminated.

B. Religion discourages same-sex marriage and this belief result to isolation of gays and lesbians.

III. We need to legalize same-sex marriage because it is a civil right and is beneficial.

• It results to financial profits.

B. It upholds family values.

C. It assists same-sex couple treasure commitments.

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Christina Harvey

Professor Sullivan

ENGL1301

17 November 2016

An Argument for same-sex Marriage

It is the right of every individual to be protected and favored by their RS Rhonda Sullivan pronoun agreement government. People who pay taxes and abide by the law should be granted the right RS Rhonda Sullivan plural of an American. It is, however, surprising that some citizens feel abandoned and mistreated because of who they are. Lesbians and gays are denied equal rights and are taken for granted by other citizens who do not uphold the same personality and values as them RS Rhonda Sullivan If this is your thesis—the argument to be supported throughout the rest of the essay, what is the purpose of the remaining information in this paragraph? . Many lesbian and gay couples are viewed as a disgrace to the society and are not granted marriage rights just like any other citizen. Discrimination of same-sex marriage should be discouraged and provision of equal rights granted so as to make gays and lesbians feel valued and respected. (Wedgwood RS Rhonda Sullivan First, parenthetical references for print sources must include page numbers. Second, source material should generally be used as support within body paragraphs to support your own ideas. Ending the intro with research material leaves the reader wondering if this is an intro or a body paragraph. )

Many countries believe in human rights and basic morals RS Rhonda Sullivan This is a vague statement. Instead, what is the specific argument that this paragraph will offer in direct support of the thesis? . The RS Rhonda Sullivan No article needed. lesbians and gays have also expressed their grievances and ought that to be adhered to RS Rhonda Sullivan ??? . Most citizens are against same sex RS Rhonda Sullivan Word missing , but it should be legalized because it is a civil right and it upholds good family values while encouraging adoption of kids. Same-sex marriage is cost-effective and has great financial benefits in the respective countries. The constitution should, therefore, be respected because its provision is independent. Other separate institutions should be allowed to perform their roles without infringing the rights of gays and lesbians. They should be allowed to express their feelings and co-exist with others freely. (Williams RS Rhonda Sullivan First, what information here comes directly from the Williams source? Second, I’m not sure of the specific point this paragraph is making. It covers many different things—good family values, economics, Constitutional right, etc. The paragraph lacks focus. RS Rhonda Sullivan This paragraph is choppy. )

Many people believe that kids need to be brought up with the help of the mother and the father RS Rhonda Sullivan This statement is too vague to control the paragraph. Instead, what is the specific argument that this paragraph will offer in direct support of the thesis? . Same-sex couples are considered inappropriate when it comes to raising kids. However, research and studies show that children raised by same-sex couples are more open-minded and concerned about others as compared to other children. The family relationship is considered critical as compared to the family structures that have been in existence. Research and studies from Human Rights Campaign Foundation have also proven that children brought up by same-sex couples receive the same care as those raised by couples who are straight. A same-sex couple can provide parental care that is needed by any normal kid in development. (Meezan RS Rhonda Sullivan What information belongs to Meezan and what belongs to you? Be sure that the majority of the paragraph does not come from source material and that source material is properly identified. ) RS Rhonda Sullivan This paragraph is choppy.

In the recent years RS Rhonda Sullivan Recently. Also, a transition is needed from the previous paragraph. , same-sex marriage has been opposed because it would cost a lot of tax payer’s money. People feel uncomfortable when their tax is channeled towards financing gay marriage even though same-sex couple also pays taxes RS Rhonda Sullivan Couples also pay . The marriage of gays and lesbians is of great financial benefits to the countries that legalize them due to many factors. Benefits accrued include higher income taxes, increased financial benefits through licenses and reduced cost of benefit programs for the state. Legalizing gay marriage will help the government save money that is used in programs that assist the public. RS Rhonda Sullivan How so? Examples? This will help the government concentrate on development programs that benefit the entire country. RS Rhonda Sullivan choppy

Same-sex couples are denied the right to claim social security of their partners when they die. This is undesirable because same-sex couple needs to obtain social security as other citizens. Currently, there are no efforts to consider survivors benefits for same-sex couple even though they pay for social security. People of different sexual orientation should not be discriminated by the government and should be considered equal. The state should ensure that they receive retirements benefits so that they can fend for their kids because the kids did not choose the kind of parents that they needed. Legal recognition of the gays should be enshrined in the law and all benefits accrued by normal citizens should also be provided to same-sex marriage. (Boonin RS Rhonda Sullivan see previous comments regarding source material. )

The push for same-sex marriage recognition is not to oppose religion or any other institution but to meet the civil rights of individuals that are involved. Many people accept the fact that they do not hate gays and lesbians but they disagree with their way of life. Religious beliefs and affiliations should be kept to individuals and those that do not uphold them should be left to choose their destiny. Other people argue that same-sex marriage could only be legalized if the involved parties are confined at one point and allowed to co-exist on their own. Isolating people is an act of social injustice and should be discouraged in any given society. RS Rhonda Sullivan How does this information support the topic sentence?

In a nutshell, RS Rhonda Sullivan delete the law and constitution should consider legalizing same-sex marriage because it is a civil right that should be granted to the respective individuals. Also, same-sex marriage result in financial profits upholds family values and helps the government in cost saving. People who love each other have the right to celebrate and treasure commitment to each other. Marriage is crucial, and it should be legally considered regardless of sexual orientation. The fact that people love each other should be respected and treated with equality.

Work RS Rhonda Sullivan plural Cited RS Rhonda Sullivan Entries use hanging indent and alphabetical order.

Wedgwood, Ralph. “The Fundamental Argument for Same-Sex Marriage.” Journal of Political Philosophy RS Rhonda Sullivan Titles of journals and books are italicized. Make this change throughout. 7.3 (2000) : 225-242. Print. RS Rhonda Sullivan This is the format for MLA 7th edition. This course uses the 8th edition, as noted in announcements and the link given.

Williams, Reginald. “Same-Sex Marriage and Equality.” Ethical Theory and Moral Practice 14.5 (2011) : 589-595. Print.

Meezan, William, and Jonathan Rauch. “Gay marriage, same-sex parenting, and Americaʼs children.” Future of Children 2005 : 97-115. Print.

Boonin, David. “Same-sex marriage and the argument from public disagreement.” Journal of Social Philosophy 30.2 (2001) : 251-259. Print.

Teacher Notes:

Your topic is certainly timely and relevant. While I think there are good points throughout, those are not always at the forefront of the argument. You’ve taken a stance—same sex marriage should be treated equally. That said, each body paragraph must focus on a specific point of support for your topic, beginning with the topic sentence. As the essay continues, the paragraphs do a better job of this, but early paragraphs are too vague with topic statements, leading the paragraphs themselves to muddle about in various topics instead of being controlled. In addition, body paragraphs must develop in parallel fashion. That means they must all approach the topic in the same way. Some paragraphs’ topic sentences focus on the couples, while others focus on the offenders. Finally, source material is not clearly used here. Information must either be quoted or paraphrased and must provide parenthetical references with page numbers immediately following the material used. Be sure to review the examples at the links on Bb and in your text, as well as the in-text comments here, before revising.