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Blackfish by Nasser Alf ahaid

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FINAL GRADE

70/100 Blackfish GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor Nasser,

I really think that yo ur co mmand o f English is go o d, and this is a co herently written and tho ughtf ul essay abo ut he do cumentary we watched. Ho wever, it is no t a rheto rical analysis, which is what was assigned.

T he mo st grievo us issue in this essay is that yo u do no t really f rame the writing in o ur discussio n o f appeals and rheto ric. Yo u need to co nsider each type o f appeal- - lo go s, etho s, and patho s- - and discuss ho w Co wperthwaite uses them to pro ve her o wn po ints abo ut SeaWo rld’s business practices and its treatment o f bo th its animals and its emplo yees.

Additio nally, there are no ne o f the required direct quo tatio ns and in- text citatio ns that this paper was wo rking to intro duce yo u to . Please review the assignment sheet and the Rheto rical Analysis sample to see what I mean by this.

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Comment 2 T he thesis needs to be mo re specif ic and mentio n pro o f s o r appeals o r even all three o f them specif ically. T hink abo ut yo ur thesis as a ro ad- map, and it must set up the o verall o rganizatio n f o r the rest o f the essay.

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Article Error Yo u may need to remo ve this article.

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Article Error Yo u may need to remo ve this article.

Verb T his verb may be inco rrect. Pro o f read the sentence to make sure yo u have used the co rrect f o rm o f the verb.

Article Error Yo u may need to remo ve this article.

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