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Alexander Ames - a day ago

You still end this introduction having described the phenomenon clearly (even more clearly than in your previous draft) but without responding to a specific, arguable, question at issue with a discrete claim (i.e. thesis statement). You need to address this in future revisions.

Alexander Ames - a day ago

Business and technology focus on cyber-crime

Alexander Ames - a day ago

Do not place sectional headings just above page-breaks, separating them from the texts they introduce.

Alexander Ames - a day ago

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(Editors of Encyclopedia Britannica, 2016).

Alexander Ames - a day ago

Double-check the formatting of this and other such, in-text, citations against the APA guidelines.

Alexander Ames - a day ago

A fundamental breach of personal or corporate privacy is a type of cybercrime at one far end. This revolves around such crimes as assaults on the integrity of stored information. It also entails blackmailing corporate persons by using their digital information for personal gain.

Alexander Ames - a day ago

Because this is an academic essay, you should articulate the points of your argument in standard prose paragraphs, rather than in professional-style bulleted lists/outlines.

Alexander Ames - a day ago

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External Cyber Attacks- External cyber-attacks in most cases involve cybercriminals who can be the employees. It rapidly increased and causing regular instability among companies and organizations.

Alexander Ames - a day ago

Please see my last comment.

Alexander Ames - a day ago

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The loss of intellectual property and sensitive data- This is commonly known as the economic espionage. Losses due to this may not be precisely estimated. Such information which have been is not completely lost. Cyber criminals can take a company’s product plans and even its customer lists today, and the company will still have them tomorrow.

Alexander Ames - a day ago

Please see my last two comments.

Alexander Ames - a day ago

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Mobile Pickpocketing-

Alexander Ames - a day ago

See my last 3 comments.

Alexander Ames - a day ago

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These persons should know clearly how to notify, and to preserve evidence.

Alexander Ames - a day ago

Only here, do you really move from description to argumentation. You need to foreground this idea of 'how to respond appropriately' and integrate it throughout the entire essay, beginning with a much clearer thesis statement (please see my earlier comment).

Alexander Ames - a day ago

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Valid User Credential

Alexander Ames - a day ago

This list gestures toward a solution to a problem but it is still a list rather than the sort of paragraph appropriate herein (see my earlier comments on this topic).

Alexander Ames - a day ago

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t is not a simple thing to stop this cybercrime act which as bring down many organizations. However, a relentless progression that requires each and every individual or stakeholder in the business world should be conducted. Such should be implemented in both Government and private sectors.

Alexander Ames - a day ago

Here, again, is an all too brief and far too late glimpse of your actual argument, which you must foreground and integrate more thoroughly throughout.

Alexander Ames - a day ago

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References

Alexander Ames - a day ago

Double check your formatting against the APA guidelines.

Alexander Ames - a day ago