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FINAL GRADE

82/100

Firefighter

GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

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Comment 1

Go o d start, but yo u have so me co rrectio ns to make and so me inf o rmatio n to add.

Comment 2

On what date did yo u administer the survey?

Comment 3

Go o d data but co rrect the co mma splice.

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Comment 4

Go o d pie graph, but place it earlier, immediately af ter yo u intro duce it in the f irst paragraph o f

yo ur Results. Do n't wait to place the pie graph here. T here is no need to underline yo ur

sentence.

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Comment 5

Do n't present this data in a pie graph. Just present it in yo ur sentence. It's no t particularly usef ul

to have a pie that ef f ectively has o nly o ne wedge.

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Comment 6

Same here. Do n't present o ne data po int in a pie graph. Write the inf o rmatio n in sentences.

Comment 7

Why do yo u think peo ple think f iref ighters earn mo re mo ney? Speculate why?

Comment 8

What do yo u think is respo nsible f o r this result? Add to yo ur discussio n. T his is a go o d start,

but it's to o sho rt.

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Comment 9

So me o f this data belo ngs in yo ur Discussio n- - where yo u o f f er yo ur o pinio n as to why the data

turned o ut the way it did.

Comment 10

1 and 3 are no t ways to help students better understand the jo b o f f iref ighting. T hey are ways

to impro ve the pro f essio n o f f iref ighting. What can yo u do to get o ut the inf o rmatio n- - the

co rrect inf o rmatio n to students?

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Comment 11

T hese are all so urces yo u're using in yo ur backgro und, right?

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