Revision for MasterTutor

General Internal Comment Index:

Comments for clarification and or revision in bold or green and red– if you cannot see comments ask and it will be sent in another format

Strikethrough, indicates suggested removal

Underlining, indicated duplicated words with the suggestion of changing to avoid repetition

Blue highlighting is to call your attention here

Yellow highlighting is to call your immediate attention here- requires a response to earn a grade

[[??]] indicates an area that needs your clarification

[[MLA]] indicates a MLA formatting error

SP indicates a misspelled word

[[?MLA]] Artworks, Book Titles, and Journal Names in MLA are italicized   For example: The Starry Night

[[?]] ~“you,” “we,” and “us” “our” are typically not used in essays. Instead specifically state who is being referred to in each instance. Being specific in an essay provides the greatest opportunity for understanding on the reader’s part.- correct all if you have any

~use formal wording within an essay

[[?]]~“thing” is typically not used in essays. Instead specifically state who/what is being referred to in each instance. Being specific in an essay provides the greatest opportunity for understanding on the reader’s part.- correct all if you have any

[[?]]~contractions are typically not used in essays. Instead spell out. For example (can’t = cannot).

[[MLA]] Please use the example essay and Writing Center resources for how to set up a paper in MLA style.  If you are uncertain then how to use MLA, contact the Writing Center personnel or myself, as we are here to help you.

Example MLA style in-text citation(( note in-text citation goes outside quotation marks yet inside period- correct all) page number follows author name):   According to a program organizer at one of the universities, “Interpreting art is essential for understanding and important to higher education” (Smith 25). This author goes on to say that visual artist, SW Jones’s, intent is to encourage this process within the “telling of his artworks” (27).

~contractions are typically not used in essays. Instead spell out for example (can’t = cannot).

~generally with English grammar, especially formal writing, a sentence cannot end in a preposition

~I have learned the word “that” rarely needs or should be used within English grammar. Try eliminating the word, and if the sentence makes sense without it or if (who, whom, or which) serves the purpose better eliminate the ‘that’