Soc quiz + small email

2. help me write a small email.

Analyze the following email and then revise it to reflect that the writer has considered her audience and will use an appropriate tone. Ensure that the email establishes a purpose early and includes practical and appropriate content. Lastly, take into account that writing in the workplace should be ethical, and make changes as needed.

To: Mr. Bob Jones, store manager

From: Marjorie Allen, employee

Subject: going to the lake

Hey, Mr. Jones,

Seeing as Labor Day weekend is in two weeks, I was going to try to go to the lake one last time with my friends. I know the store gets busy this time of year since lots of people starting thinking about going hiking and buying cool weather trail and hiking gear from our store, which is great because people should try to be healthy and active even when it gets cooler.

Anyway, can you clarify what the policy is for requesting time off? I mean, can I put in my request now to get that whole weekend off or is it too late? I don’t need four or five sstraight days off or anything, but I’ll take whatever I can get. Jim told me there was something in the employee handbook, but I figured it would be easier to just ask you. Plus, there’s this rumor that the handbook doesn’t really apply these days anyway...

Later, Marjorie