Formal Outline
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Mastery |
Expertise |
Proficiency |
Competency |
Novice |
Missing |
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Sufficient Development |
Points: 2.5 (10%) |
Points: 2.25 (9%) |
Points: 2 (8%) |
Points: 1.75 (7%) |
Points: 1.5 (6%) |
Points: 0 (0%) |
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Clear Organizational Pattern |
Points: 12.5 (50%) |
Points: 11.25 (45%) |
Points: 10 (40%) |
Points: 8.75 (35%) |
Points: 7.5 (30%) |
Points: 0 (0%) |
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Parenthetical Citations |
Points: 5 (20%) |
Points: 4.5 (18%) |
Points: 4 (16%) |
Points: 3.5 (14%) |
Points: 3 (12%) |
Points: 0 (0%) |
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Reference Citations |
Points: 5 (20%) |
Points: 4.5 (18%) |
Points: 4 (16%) |
Points: 3.5 (14%) |
Points: 3 (12%) |
Points: 0 (0%) |
formal outline 2/Formal(instruction).odt
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Assignment Objective: Create an clear organizational pattern to present the argument, support, counterclaims, and rebuttals which will develop a stronger argument to persuade readers.
Student Example: Formal Outline Example
Template Documents: Formal Outline Template
At this point you have your ideas flushed out and you have your support information gathered – now it’s time to get it all organized.
The essay outline, an essential portion of the drafting process, assists writers to organize their material before beginning the rough draft. Before you start your outline complete the assigned readings and read the details offered here to ensure you meet all the requirements of the formal outline. In this class you are required to write a formal outline - one that is much more developed and detailed than you may have completed before.
The formal outline incorporates the ideas formulated in the roadmap and the information gathered and analyzed in the annotated bibliography. Setting out ideas in the order anticipated alerts writers to gaps in the development of their ideas and can show them where key ideas lack sufficient support (or have too much material for the shape of the full paper).
The outline assists you to organize your ideas and support in a way that directly supports your thesis statement. Add transitions sentences in-between sections to lead readers to new ideas, include further analysis of source information, and incorporate your own analysis to round out your argument – all of which will force you to think through your plans for the paper.
If you find the outline confining, remember this one fact – you will have a good majority of your paper written after completing your outline. Let that be your motivation! Whether this comes naturally or not, you have two previous assignments to assist you – the roadmap and the annotated bibliography – use the outline discovery draft to begin your basic outline (the Roman Numerals for each section), your basic ideas of support (capital letters A, B, etc), your support information from the sources (1, 2, etc), and finally your analysis of the support information (a, b, etc).
Notes:
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Put your thesis statement in bold lettering.
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Complete sentences & transitional sentences
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Include parenthetical citations
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Reference page
Important: I will grade this assignment based on the organizational pattern, not on the quality of the sources, which was assessed in the annotated bibliography assignment. If you are still using inappropriate sources at this stage in the writing process, I will not address that here. If you are concerned about a source, review the feedback you received from the annotated bibliography. If you have a new source and are unsure about it, email the link and we can discuss it.
formal outline 2/Student Example - Formal Outline(1).pdf
Student Example – Formal Essay Outline
Paper topic – Radio Frequency Identification in hospitals). *Note: this outline is not without errors, but is used to show the formatting.
III. Reduce costs throughout the medical facility – track items in “real time” A. Wasted man-‐hours
1. Medical personnel spend countless man-‐hours searching for medical equipment such as wheel chairs, portable x-‐ray machines (Revere, 2010, pg. 28). a. Basic items with high frequency use can be accounted for quickly and easily without
wasting valuable time. b. Having to spend even a few extra minutes to search down a wheelchair is not good
use of time for medical staff and RFID allows for staff to pinpoint the exact location of the item they need.
B. Faster prep of patients 1. “Patients are given a regular identification bracelet and one implanted with an RFID chip,
allowing them to be tracked at the various steps in the surgical process” (Secours, 2011, p. 72) a. Staff knows when each patient is ready for the next step of the preparation process. b. Staff does not need to check with one another about the patient status. c. Staff does not need to ask the patient the same questions over an over again.
2. RFID decreased “surgical prep time from 45 minutes to 20 minutes, by providing an alert to staff members at the exact moment a patient leaves a surgical room, thereby notifying them that the room is ready to be cleaned and prepared for the next patient (Secours, 2011, p. 73).
3. Finally the RFID system will alert staff that a surgery is complete and the patient has been moved to recovery, allowing for the staff to prep for the next surgery Secours, 2011, p. 73). a. Not only are man-‐hours decreased, but patient satisfaction increases. b. The patient does not have to continue to wait.
C. Lawsuits from post-‐surgery equipment loss 1. Surgical nurses, doctors, assistants already have a system to account for medical
instruments and supplies used in surgery, but mistakes happen which results in massive lawsuits. a. Recent studies noted that “mistakes occur in 1 of every 1,000 to 1,500
interabdominal operations” (Gawande, et al, 2003, p. 63) b. Since the items are all RFID tagged, medical professionals can easily check to ensure
all instruments are accounted for after surgery. 2. These types of lawsuits can drop drastically with the use of RFID taking.
a. Medical faculties’ payout billions in lawsuits from post operations due to left behind medical instruments and surgical sponges enclosed in patients after surgery (Gawande, M.D., 2003).
b. The use of RFID decreases the risk, thus decreases costly lawsuits. c. RFID protect the health of the patient, but also the liabilities related to surgery.
D. Savings examples 1. “St. Olavs Hospital in Trondheim, Norway… saved $6 million… by tracking hospital scrubs
with RFID-‐embedded tags” (Rand, 2011, p. 14) a. Even hospital uniform tracking would save money. Since many employees wear a
hospital issue uniform that they do not own, the uniforms could be tracked and accounted for.
b. Staff would have to check out the uniform, and check back in the uniform. 2. One hospital system in Virginia found a decrease in the “incidence of lost and stolen
equipment by 50 percent” (Secours, 2011, p. 76) a. The inflated cost of a hospital stay should be drastically affected if the cost would not
have to include replacing lost and stolen items. b. Hospitals would not have to overstock high use items, as the items would be
accounted for and accessible. E. Transition – Money isn’t the only thing saved – lives are saved.
Overall topic of this section
2nd Supporting Idea (directly supports topic
of reduced costs
1st Supporting Idea (directly supports topic
of reduced costs
3rd Supporting Idea (directly supports topic
of reduced costs
4th Supporting Idea (directly supports topic of reduced
costs
Transitional sentence to the next section of support (RFID saves lives)
Supporting information from
source
Explanation of the source information
Supporting information from source
This time, the student started with his own ideas, then used the source
information to support
(this method is preferred)
__MACOSX/formal outline 2/._Student Example - Formal Outline(1).pdf
formal outline 2/Template Document - analytical Essay Formal Outline(1)(1).doc
Feel free to use this document as a template for your own outline.
This is a skeleton outline example. Use to begin outlining your essay and change as needed. *Note: Each Roman Numeral is a section, not a paragraph. Each section should have multiple paragraphs depending on the explanation and support offered in each section.
*Include parenthetical citations with all information from a source
Name Due Date Course Name/Instructor Assignment Name
Skeleton Outline: Argument Research Paper
I. Introduction:
A. Attention getter (starting with a scenario story or interesting fact may work)
B. Topic Introductory Information
C. Thesis:
II. Topic (History/Background)
A. Supporting Idea
1. Supporting information from Source
2. Explanation
B. Supporting information from Source
1. Explanation
2. Explanation
C. Transition
III. Supporting Topic #1
A. Supporting Idea
1. Supporting information from Source
2. Explanation
B. Counterargument
1. Supporting information from Source
2. Explanation
C. Rebuttal
1. Supporting information from Source
2. Explanation
D. Transition
IV. Supporting Topic #2
A. Supporting Idea
1. Supporting information from Source
2. Explanation
B. Counterargument
1. Supporting information from Source
2. Explanation
C. Rebuttal
1. Supporting information from Source
2. Explanation
D. Transition
V. Supporting Topic #3
A. Supporting Idea
1. Supporting information from Source
2. Explanation
B. Counterargument
1. Supporting information from Source
2. Explanation
C. Rebuttal
1. Supporting information from Source
2. Explanation
D. Transition
VI. Supporting Topic #4
A. Supporting Idea
1. Supporting information from Source
2. Explanation
B. Counterargument
1. Supporting information from Source
2. Explanation
C. Rebuttal
1. Supporting information from Source
2. Explanation
D. Transition
VII. Conclusion
A. Revisit thesis/topic
B. Final Thoughts (what idea do you want to leave readers with?) *Hint: Do not suggest they should think about think topic, or consider the topic. You want them to agree with your opinion/research.
*Include references on following page.
References