For katetutor ONLY Final Essay

Important review on the rough draft

Apply the changes below on the draft for the final one ( It is important to apply them ALL)

You need to have a 10 pages analytical paper -( not including the reference page / title page) But no more than 10. If you fall short or exceed, you will lose 5% of your possible points.I will stop reading the paper after 10 pages - any part of the paper after page 10 I will not review/grade.

You are limited in the amounts of quoted material you are allowed to include. You must WRITE this paper, not assemble a series of ideas from your extras. No more than 15% of your paper can be direct quotes from other people's writing.

Comments on the paper :

1- The flow was good, but I would add more supportive areas to bulk up the thesis and support the entire paper. The organization was ok, but with more material and lets say 3 areas that compliment each other and one leads into the next, ending with 3 areas feeding into the last of the 4 ideas, you could have an awesome paper.

The thesis statement is short and lacked more points. In turn the paper only supported the thesis. The paper in all lacks a bulk of research and material.

2- The expert interview comments where valuable, but very brief. And a more detailed or drawing introduction or lead in to the interview would flow better for the audience. interview should have a reference like (L. Lee, persona communication, March 5, 2016).

3-The paper could have used more research and more material. It seamed to be very short and to the point lacking supportive ideas or supportive statements.The conclusion doesn't introduce new information. It does sum up the paper. The conclusion to me as the reader in some ways is talking down to the audience. I feel like I am being told what I need to understand and how I am supposed to feel

4-There are a few paragraphs that end with a floating quotation. Consider rearranging the paragraph, or adding supportive comments after the quote. Try not to end with a quote. You may also consider transition sentences between paragraphs.

CHECKLIST: ANALYSIS PAPER

• Is your topic on a technology in your future career field?

• Does your essay include an analytical thesis statement?

• Have you adequately defined terms used for your argument?

• Have you taken into consideration the values, beliefs, opinions of your audience?

• Have you been fair and addressed counterarguments?

• Have you supported your claims with evidence?

• Have you established credibility?

• Have you documented all information that was not your own?

• Have you reviewed the Originality Report and made the proper corrections?

• Have you constructed logical arguments?

• Have you avoided logical fallacies?

• Have you provided your readers with adequate background information?

• Have you presented your points in a clear and concise manner and organized them understandably?

• Have you written an interesting introduction and a strong conclusion to your paper?

• Have you reviewed the grading rubric?