Quality of Idea: Unacceptable (5 points)
-Based upon the description you've given, I cannot determine your independent or dependent variables. I have only a vague idea of how you intend to conduct your study or what the purpose of the study is based upon your description. You need to be much more clear about the research question(s) you are intending to answer.
Organization of Introduction: Fair (7 points)
-You need to explain the overall goal of your study. Be sure to explain why your research question is important and how it hasn't been covered in previous studies (if it, in fact, has not). How does your study add to the existing body of literature in the field of social psychology?
-You need to label and list the Research Question(s) you are hoping to address and answer with your study. Why is this question important? What knowledge will it add to the existing body of literature?
Literature Review: Fair (7 points)
-Your descriptions are somewhat confusing to me. I am not certain whether the studies you're describing came from peer-reviewed, scholarly sources (I can't really tell from your References list)
-If the study being discussed was an experimental study, please be sure to indicate the methodology that was used and the specific findings.
-I would also like to see you add is a brief mention of each study's relevance to your particular proposed study (e.g., "Although the authors of this study determined that _____, it remains to be seen whether _____).
Statement of Hypothesis: Unacceptable (5 points)
-You've got a paragraph labeled "Hypotheses," but it contains no actual testable predictions.
- Your statement is not nearly specific enough. You need to indicate exactly what you are predicting (e.g., Group X will display more of Characteristic A than Group Y on Task Z). How will you measure any of the constructs you are discussing in this section? Please clarify and be as specific as possible. Are you having an experimental and a control group? What are you assessing and how are you assessing it?
Research Design (Methods Section): Unacceptable (5 points)
-I see no description of methodology you intend to use for your own study. It's just a discussion of how to use an interview method in general and the risks and benefits.
-You need to flesh out a lot more detail here. What is the projected number (and age, gender, and ethnicity) of your participants? How will you obtain informed consent and how much will you tell them about the purpose of the study? Will they be compensated?
-I would strongly suggest you go back to the instructions for this assignment and read the sample research proposal in order to see the level of detail I'm looking for. What you've written here is extremely broad and non-specific and not acceptable for a graduate student.
Procedure Section: Unacceptable (5 points)
-You need to flesh out more detail here as well. I see no description of the procedure you intend to use for your own study.
-You need to take the reader through your procedure step by step. What will people in each group experience? What is the sequence of events?
-You need to briefly describe the data analysis you will perform on the variables you measure. What types of statistical analyses would you use to get the results?
Overall Content: Unacceptable (5 points)
- I'll be honest. This is not graduate-level work. You've got a lot of work to do.
Style and Grammar: Fair to Good (7.5 points)
-Please see comment inserted directly into your paper using the Track Changes feature.
APA Style: Fair (7 points)
-Use these Sample Papers as guidelines:
http://supp.apa.org/style/PM6E-Corrected-Sample-Papers.pdf
https://owl.english.purdue.edu/media/pdf/20090212013008_560.pdf
Bibliography/References: Fair (7 points)
-I am concerned about your sources. You need to eliminate any that come from popular magazines, newspapers, or websites. Those are not peer-reviewed, scholarly sources, such as academic journals.
Final Score:
61/100
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