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Tamim Alhussein

11/19/2015

Job Analysis

Being a computer science major was my dream when I was young because I love using technologies since my childhood because technologies are related to everything in our life. When I finished high school my father convinced me to change the idea of being a computer science student. After a couple days, I started thinking about his idea. He told me that there a lot of computer science students studying abroad, and how hard it is to find a job with this major in these days. Moreover, I applied to the college as a civil engineering major, and I thought I will like it. After studying one year as a civil engineering major I’m going to change my major to Mechanical engineering because I found it more interesting and I didn’t like being a civil engineering major. Comment by JPW: Too many “because” conjunctions. Comment by JPW: How does this sentence relate to the previous one? Make an explicit connection. Comment by JPW: Need a verb. Comment by JPW: Revise for word choice.

In order to get good information in mechanical engineering, I interviewed someone who has been in this field as a profession. His name is Abdullah Alsgaihi. Abdullah did his bachelor’s degree in mechanical engineering in the UK the University of Leeds. After getting his degree in mechanical engineering he went back to Saudi Arabia and started working as a mechanical engineer in Saudi Aramco. Saudi Aramco is a big oil company in Saudi Arabia Comment by JPW: Add the information called for in the guidelines. Also, add a thesis statement.

Mechanical engineers design and oversee the manufacturing of many products ranging from medical devices to new batteries. Furthermore, they design power-producing machines such as electric generators, internal combustion engines, and steam and gas turbines as well as power-using machines, such as refrigeration and air-conditioning systems. They design other machines inside buildings, such as elevators and escalators. They also design material-handling systems, such as conveyor systems and automated transfer stations. Like other engineers, mechanical engineers use computers extensively. Computers help mechanical engineers create and analyze designs, run simulations and test how a machine is likely to work, and generate specifications for parts. Abdullah mentioned that he never thought that he will be able to build machines when he was young. (Bureau of Labor Statistics) Comment by JPW: Add a specific topic sentence (see the sample essay on Blackboard). Comment by JPW: Use the last name, “Alsgaihi.” Comment by JPW: Provide us a picture of what a typical day/week of a mechanical engineer.

According to Abdullah, working conditions at Aramco were very conducive to all its employees in that they offer various things such as; a good salary, starting from 18,000 SAR/month in the first year and this went up every year. There was an early retirement with a car, the management was friendly which boosted the moral of all employers, health insurance, house allowance was also offered, sick leaves and off duties were awarded accordingly. The company offers lot things for its employees like champions’ league, healthy food and drinks, a gym and more activities. Comment by JPW: Start with the general information from sources. Then, where appropriate, add information from Alsgaihi as examples.

According to the Bureau of Labor and Statistics, employment in this field career is projected to grow by 4.5% between 2012 and 2022, creating to about 11,600 new positions. (ICMET & Zhang, 2012) This creates broad job opportunities within that hiring window which leaves aspiring mechanical engineers feeling encouraged. Abdullah contends that, in order to become a mechanical engineer, you will be requiring to have at least a bachelor degree. On the hand, in order to be in a high position you need a high degree like Master, PhD, and a good experience in the same field. Mechanical engineering employment projected to increase 5 percent from 2012 to 2022, which is slower than the average of all other jobs. Staying abreast of the latest advances in technologies may be best for those who are looking for job. (Bureau of Labor Statistics)

In conclusion, learning from my friend Abdullah, I conclude that becoming an engineer doesn't need a specific type of training. Instead, it is a never ending learning experience, where you are expected to learn and master new things to make you a better problem solver over time. As an alternative, it is a no way ending learning experience, where you are anticipated to learn and master new stuff to make you a great and better problem solver over time. However, there is need to balance working and other important things in our lives such as family and social life.

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References Comment by JPW: Put the “Works Cited” page as its own page. Also, clean up your citations.

International Conference on Mechanical Engineering and Technology, & Zhang, T. (2012).

Bureau of Labor Statistics. (https://collegegrad.com/careers/mechanical-engineers)