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I when I was reading your rough draft I thought you covered all the points you needed to appropriately. The one issue I found with you essay was that it lack a whole introduction paragraph. So you didn't have an attention getter or a thesis statement so the reader doesn't know the purpose of the essay. I found that the order of you body paragraphs worked fine and were logical. I feel your transitions were smooth and worked nicely. Finally your conclusion wrapped up you nicely giving the reader a feeling a closure.