Re-Examination 5
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Edcy M. Lebrón, 52148226, 05017800, 8533 Quarter Horse Dr. Riverview, FL 33578,
Penn Foster studies are classes that are carried out online and undertaken by
instructors and lecturers. These classes is are taken while someone is at home or part time
studies. Most of the people undertaking the Penn Foster are mostly old people who
already have a family, or they are working class people. These people find more
problems in buying time for their studies as the family demands are required Moreover,
time for studying. Many of these people struggle for years to accomplish all the daily
chaos including the learning time. Penn Foster members at most face difficulties when it
comes to finding time for their plans, concentrating on their studies and others things to
take care of. This problem always may have a solution and others they are supposed to be
faced to accomplish. For me to tackle all the daily tasks, there are some of the problems
and possible solutions how to overcome them.
During the day, there are several issues you need to cater for before the days goes,
and you would like to accomplish all without favoring one or forgetting others. To
manage this, set a daily planner for the whole day that will schedule all the work you are
to do for the day. Sometimes you may take all your classes to part time after work and
during the other time you set all the goals for the day. But sometimes it is hard to work
after a hard day of work might be difficult and this can be disgusting. And this mostly
will lead to no focus in classroom and sometimes you do not have moods for learning.
For instance, when you have worked from 8:00 a.m. to around 5:00 p.m. and school
levels is from 5:30 p.m. to 8:30 p.m. and still having family chaos. The daily planner will
enable plan semester classes and allow you to take your time and go at your own pace.
This is the point where balancing and organizing a daily planner. With a daily planner, I
will be able to do all my assignment in time, remember tasks and conferences at or that
Comment [WU1]: Using the word “undertaken” here means that the lecturers and instructors are taking the classes.
Comment [WU2]: You are saying that this group is old, but this is not the case. Many people of all ages take these courses.
Comment [WU3]: Awkward wording
Comment [WU4]: Confusing
Comment [WU5]: Awkward wording
Comment [WU6]: You need to make this a more personal essay. You do not need to explain the types of people who take these courses because they are already your audience. You are missing a thesis that states the focus – the steps of your process for balancing distance education with work and family. What steps do YOU take to manage your time?
Comment [WU7]: The first sentence of each paragraph is the topic sentence that states the main idea of the paragraph. For this essay, each topic sentence should state a step of your process.
Comment [WU8]: Is this a step you take? Again, this needs to be a personal essay.
Comment [WU9]: Awkward
Comment [WU10]: What do you mean?
Comment [WU11]: The focus should be distance duration which means there is no classroom.
Comment [WU12]: What do you mean?
Comment [WU13]: Awkward
Comment [WU14]: Fragment
Edcy M. Lebrón, 52148226, 05017800, 8533 Quarter Horse Dr. Riverview, FL 33578,
necessities to be encounter at a definite time setting. Time planner also enables meet with
my family and friend’s bashes, Jamboree and nuptials.
The next thing is to stick to your study plan. To practice this, you have to forego
other this issues that you were had promised, and it was supposed you fulfill. Someday
my spouse desired to go party, I certainly did not dance so I communicated to her about
the big exam I was studying for, which was a much lie but I had to. Further, I neglected
my daughter’s birthday party that I could focus on an essay I was mounting. Life
sometimes can be so inspirational in itself, add a sample of assignment of school can be
astonishing. So stabbing to your learning design is very significant. To balance all the
task, you have to try to test yourself every week. Each week I crack to challenge myself
by creation it somewhat like a game, how much could I get done each day. To do this, I
try to get at least an hour or two of studying done each day. Abiding by that would be
very tough, my son Is continually in my ear, particularly when I'm reading. AS loud as he
can, he's yelling ‘Daddy that drives me fissured but this helps me in the next category on
how to manage.
You must buy time for the little things, or you will end up not being able to
handle the demands of college and life. Some things that you can try is to have some fun.
If you have a spouse, you can make time to go out to have some fun. Those of you with
kids may joy going to a baseball game if your team wins its a big plus. Even if you get
onward in your studies, you could try taking a break for a few days to help refresh your
mind. A refreshed mind works more professionally than an overtoiled one. So you see
taking the time to enjoy the little things in life could be a big help in maintaining your
school work and life's demands on you.
Comment [WU15]: Confusing
Comment [WU16]: Confusing – Review sentence structure in your handbook and review the rest of your essay for errors. Your errors in sentence structure are interfering with the meaning you are trying to communicate.
Comment [WU17]: You state a good idea, but you need to develop it. You include general information, but you need to be personal and specific. Do you use a planner? What types of information do you include in it? How do you use it in your daily life? How is this a step to help manage your time for your studies?
Comment [WU18]: What step do you take to stick to your study plan? What is your study plan?
Comment [WU19]: You need to be more specific here. What is the step for managing your time? How does it help you to balance your studies?
Comment [WU20]: Your main idea here seems to be to make personal time. How is this a step for managing your time? How does this help with balancing your studies?
Edcy M. Lebrón, 52148226, 05017800, 8533 Quarter Horse Dr. Riverview, FL 33578,
Another way is to create a flexible schedule. Some portions of your agenda are going to
be inflexible, such as class times and work days. I usually rather work at night on
weekdays and days on weekends, so on weekdays I could not do coursework and on
weekends I desired to go with my associates. Fit homework and learning in when you are
not in class or not at work. Build a routine that you can stick to, but can modify if other
essential things come up. As a working student, I have to be ready to familiarize to new
projects, quick errands, and sudden work catastrophes that need to be addressed instantly.
I try to sort enough studying phase in my schedule so that if something comes up, I can
shift it into another space during the week. I used to postpone a lot; I always wanted to go
out with my friends and put my school work to the side. Now I can manage all the day’s
task. At times, you will lose focus but stick to your plans and you will succeed. So you
see that if you keep a good plan you will be able to balance your time wisely, which in
return lead you to the right grades.
One of the key issues is to be organized. Preserve your school materials organized
and in a logical place. Mark approaching deadlines on your calendar and start school
projects early to allow ample time to complete them in case other things come up in the
meantime. Go through folders and get purged of papers that are obsolete. Having all of
those extra papers that you got back a month ago in your folder will make it heavy. But
worst of all, you would not be able to find documents when you need them, I would
dislike when this would happen to me. Get any supplies that you may need and that you
don't have. Even if that individual item was not on the list, but you can get it if it seems
worthy of you, such as a portable rubber. I bought a planner that I thought I wasn't going
Comment [WU21]: What step do you take to do this? Isn’t this the reason for the planner?
Comment [WU22]: What step do you take to be organized?
Edcy M. Lebrón, 52148226, 05017800, 8533 Quarter Horse Dr. Riverview, FL 33578,
to need now I put everything in it from my school work to when I have time to go out
with my friends; it has helped me so much.
Finally, something that is very important to me is to learn to cope stress. Stress is
a part of being a student and a worker, combine both together and you can anticipate
being stressed out. As much as you may try to avoid stress, you're going to have to learn
how to release it as well. Create time to collect yourself when you need it the most, so
you can criticise things with a clear head. Be active, upholding a vigorous life helps
release stress and you will find if the more you get out and exercise, the easier work, and
school will seem. This was my chief problem; I was always emphasizing I felt like I was
going to flop in everything. I knew I had to find a way to manage it all. After I started this
fresh tedious all appeared so much cooler and I would get so much done deprived of
stress.
Exam 050178 - Process Analysis
Traits of Good Writing
Review pages 164-169 in your study guide for a complete
explanation of the rating you earned for each trait as well
as references you can study to improve your writing
skills.
Skill
Realized
Skill
Developing
Skill
Emerging
Not
Shown
Ideas & Content The writer comments on all 3 areas of his or her life including ways he or she manages each
area. There is a clear combination of both narration and
process analysis.
30 28 26 24 22 15 0
Organization There is a clear thesis statement and introductory paragraph. There is a clear beginning,
middle and conclusion to the essay which restates the
thesis.
25 23 22 21 19 12 0
Voice The writer addressed the audience clearly and 10 9 8 7 6 4 0
Comment [WU23]: You mainly offer advice here, but you need to state a specific step and then explain how you use it in your daily life to manage your time.
Comment [WU24]: The conclusion should restate a thesis.
Edcy M. Lebrón, 52148226, 05017800, 8533 Quarter Horse Dr. Riverview, FL 33578,
correctly. They remained consistent in their point of view
and maintained the correct tense.
Word Choice The writer made the correct word and verb choices. The writer defined any terms that may have
been unfamiliar. They were precise in what they were
trying to say and conveyed a clear message.
10 9 8 7 6 4 0
Grammar & Sentences The writer used correct grammar, spelling, punctuation, and sentence structure.
There were no typographical errors.
10 9 8 7 6 4 0
Format The student met the required essay length of 1,000-1,200 words. The student used a standard font and
margins. All of the required information for the header
was included.
15 14 13 12 11 8 0
Exam number: 050178 Exam grade: 54%
Date of evaluation: 10/31/15 Evaluated by: RR
IMPORTANT NOTICE
Along the right-hand side of your evaluated exam, you should see marginal
or "bubble" comments from your instructor. You should also see a series
of highlighted numbers in the evaluation chart identifying the rating you
earned on each trait. If you don't see this feedback, click on the "View"
tab and "Print Layout" or click on "Review" and the option "Final
Showing Markup." If you still cannot see the feedback, please contact the
school for the complete evaluation.
REQUIRED RETAKE INSTRUCTIONS
ENG100: 050178 “Process Analysis”
Student name: Edcy Lebron Student number: 52148226
Grade: 54% Date: 10/31/15 Evaluator: RR
Dear Edcy,
Edcy M. Lebrón, 52148226, 05017800, 8533 Quarter Horse Dr. Riverview, FL 33578,
Unfortunately, you earned a failing grade on this first-attempt submission. According to
the Academic Policies in the Penn Foster Student Handbook, you must prepare a retake
submission. Since the goal of this course is to help you improve your writing, you will
continue working with your current submission, completely revising and editing it at all
levels. Merely applying the instructor’s corrections in grammar, spelling, or format does
not show sufficient evidence that you have improved your skill level and therefore will
not result in a change to your grade.
Review these textbook page references as well as Chapters 11-14 and the study-unit
discussions related to writing a how-to essay. The following are key revisions you must
make to ensure a passing grade on your retake. If you do not understand how to
rewrite your essay in order to accomplish these goals, please contact the school.
Purpose: Explain to your fellow Penn Foster College students the steps you take to make time for studying (338-352).
Strong thesis: State a specific thesis which identifies your approach to balancing studies and your life along with the value of that approach—its importance or benefits (342, 352, 353).
Effective introduction: Write an interesting opening that engages your fellow students, establishes common ground with them/provides background information, and includes your thesis (352, 354-355).
Tone and consideration of audience: Use an appropriate tone (352).
Well-developed reasons and specific steps: Provide your fellow students with the reason(s) for each how-to step or group of related steps (342, 354-355). Anticipate trouble spots and offer solutions (344). Incorporate specific personal experiences with narration and/or illustration (239, 315). Use appropriate process transitions to guide your reader (342-344, 355).
Satisfying conclusion: Provide a satisfying conclusion beyond the last step, reminding your fellow students of the value or importance of the process to them or some other final thought (345, 355).
Editing and proofreading:
Please be certain to include this set of instructions with your retake submission, or
there may be a problem completing your evaluation. For electronic submissions, copy
and paste them at the beginning of your retake document. As part of your file name,
include “Retake” after your last name. Then submit your retake essay for grading.
Best wishes on your retake,
Edcy M. Lebrón, 52148226, 05017800, 8533 Quarter Horse Dr. Riverview, FL 33578,
Education Department
Penn Foster College
Reference
Warnock, S. (2009). Teaching writing online: How and why. Urbana, Ill: National
Council of Teachers of English.
