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The Dream Factory
This movie titled The Dream Factory directed by Xiaogang Feng was released in 1997. It’s has three main characters Qian Kang, Yao Yuan and Zhou Beiyan acted by Xiaogang Feng, You Ge and Pei Liu. Different from other general comedy films, this one is very close to people’s life. The story is about a store called The Dream Factory. It helps customers experience the life they want by making a “dream tour”. This theme is in line with prevailing background in China. In 1980s, China began to develop its economy. The tertiary industry was developing rapidly. As a result, The Dream Factory occurred. This profession brings many benefits to consumers, thus reflecting the development of the tertiary industry can improve people's living standards, improve the quality of life, and promote socialist spiritual civilization. As a comedy, it’s a really successful one. The story is good. The movie itself is not only funny but also meaningful.
This movie is consisted by several short stories. These stories are all have funny plot. For example, in the movie, there’s a customer, who is a big-mouth, asked the Dream Factory to help him experience the feeling of keeping a secret. To reach this goal, Yao Yuan tells the customer a sentence “I won’t tell unless I dead” as a secret and asks Qian Kang to scare the customer by threating him until he tells the secret. As you can imagine, during the “torture”, the customer was scared and kept telling the secret sentence: “I won’t tell unless I dead”. However, Qian Kang didn’t know this is the secret sentence. As a result, he kept scaring the customer until the customer fainted away. At the end of the story, the customer realized he is not only big mouth but also coward. Here, the movie scriptwriter plays a trick on language. That makes the plot really interesting. I need a conclusion here.
Beside the plot, the actors’ performance are also really important for a successful comedy. Between 20:30 to 21:15 in the movie. We can see those actors using lots of facial expressions and body movements to describe their mental activities. We can easily understand them even without the sound. Since it’s a comedy, these actors’ body languages are always exaggerated. However, a successful comedy needs these exaggerated performances. For example, during that clip, the camera successfully catch the eyebrow and eye movements from the fat actor Qi Li. It’s really important because eyes can send lots of information to viewers. By focusing on the body movement and expressions we can easily feel the characters’ emotions. It really helps audiences to understand the movie and makes them laughing. That directly leads to the success of this film.
Furthermore, as a successful comedy, The Dream factory is not only funny but also meaningful. This movie combines many small stories together and these stories’ themes and background are all different. As a result, to build a clear connection between each story and the main thesis, the director designs a summary scene after each story. These summaries all contain some philosophy and teaches people something. For example, in the movie, Qian Kang and Yao Yuan designed a dream tour for a hopeless man. In that tour, this man met a girl who is willing to be his girlfriend. It was a one day tour which means all the things were fake. Unfortunately, this man took seriously. Form 49:39 to 50:45, right after the tour was finished, Qian Kang and Yao Yuan were discussing about the rightness of this tour. “If the tour really helps or not”. Qian Kang says: “It’s like morphine to a terminally ill patients. Though the morphine’s effect is temporarily and it is addictive, it helps these patients by giving them hope”. This sentence gives audience a lot of space to thinking. It is related to our daily life and helps people become better. Additionally, this is not the only meaningful sentence in this movie. These sentence makes this movie deeper than a normal comedy. A successful comedy needs to be deep.
Judging from the surface, the film is in the description of a kind of business, so some of the scenes just reflects the relationship between the "consumer" and "the Dream Factory". However, the film is a true expression of emotion generated between people’s connection. This film makes us believe there will always be a group of kind people around us even when the connections between people is generally fading away due to the people’s desire for money.
The movie narrative is relatively smooth but does not lose highlights and details. The film uses “dream tour” as the clue and the overall subject to push the story developing which is clear to viewers and helps viewers to understand the movie.
