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Every one have a dream, but every one achier it differently, some of them fight to reach it, on the other hand some of them are ends their determination. From here I would like to begin my story, I grew up in a poor family, and I am the eldest child in my family I saw how was my father fight to bring money to feed us, and I saw how was the rich people amused their live, I thought a lot and a lot how we can be like them finally I realized that the only way to be like them is education success, later decided to risk in development my education . I faced a lot challenges in my career, but was it make me more determination and persistence to reach my dream and my future goal. Actually got nice grade in my education and I graduated from college, I got a job with nice salary, but was not enough to spend on my family, later I decided to complete my education in United State, but the problem was that I don't have enough money to complete my education there, but there was one way which is get the scholarship, I start ask my government about the fastest way to get their scholarship and they told me there is only one way which is I have to travel to the U.S.A and start take English program for one semester after I finish I have to send them all my greed and they are going to decide if they going to give me or not, I did what they asked me to do, I arrived to the U.S.A on Jan 1, 2013 the first 6 month without scholarship was it very difficult, my wife worked hard every day to send me money to for every month, 6 month without my wife and my daughter raly hard, finally got the scholarship, after I got it everything is shang and be more better. I graduated from the English program on Dec, 2013 and got exptnet later from lone stare I have been in lone stare for 3 semester. in conclusion,