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The following need to be revised Articulation of response 7/17/2015 ARTICULATION- The discussion regarding the data breach at VL Bank is generally organized. Awkward sentence construction, incorrect word choices, and writing convention errors persist limiting the effectiveness of the author's intended responses.  Criterion Score: 1.00  Comments on this criterion: 7/17/2015- The appropriate academic tone is established throughout the work. Several instances of awkwardly constructed sentences, incorrect word choices, and errors in editing and grammar disrupt the clarity of the writing. A few representative examples of the articulation errors noted are included in the attached document.  A1a. Legal Jurisdiction Criterion Score: 1.00  Comments on this criterion: 7/17/2015 - The response briefly states that the GBI and FBI would be involved; additional discussion for how the bank will work with these bodies of law enforcement is needed. A1b. Legal Considerations Criterion Score: 2.00  Comments on this criterion: 7/17/2015 - The response discusses ways to catalog and record the digital evidence and briefly states that "it is vital for investigators to take additional measures to verify the integrity of the information." Please revise to specifically discuss those additional measures; discussion of additional considerations for preparing and handling digital evidence is needed. A1c. Coordination  Criterion Score: 1.00  Comments on this criterion: 7/17/2015 - The response briefly states that the CISO needs to coordinate with the bank's lawyer. Please revise to provide specific coordination that should take place between the CISO and VL Bank's lawyer.  A2a. Technology Criterion Score: 1.00  Comments on this criterion: 7/17/2015 - The submission discusses authentication devices as well as IDS/IPS and firewalls. Explanation of the firewall is provided, but it is not clear how it could prevent the crime in the scenario. Explanation of the authentication device could not be located, therefore it is not clear how it could prevent the specific crime. Please revise to recommend technology and include explanation for how it can prevent the crime in the scenario. A3. Controls Criterion Score: 1.00  Comments on this criterion: 7/17/2015 - The response recommends an IDS and IPS, these are examples of technology solutions, however the response needs recommendations for controls that the bank could implement. Please revise to recommend specific controls that the bank could implement that would mitigate the impact of future attacks.