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Write a SEE-I, which stands for State, Exemplify, Example, and Illustrate. Your first sentence will be a statement, your second sentence a restatement using different words, your third an example from the text, and your fourth sentence an analogy, something you can draw a comparison to so your reader understands the concept. Your SEE-I topic is integrity. What is integrity? 

Writer1

Integrity is when you follow ethical principles, and we are taught from a young age the difference between right and wrong. In other words, it is when you have a moral compass within yourself to do the right thing and to not deviate from that. An example from the novel is when the two paramedics are brought in to handle the undead at one in the morning, they continued to work long hours to uncover them. These long hours show that they perform their duties above and beyond what is required. (Lindqvist, 78). It is like a doctor that will spend countless hours and resources looking to diagnose his patient correctly.  

Lindqvist, John. Handling the Undead. New York: Thomas Dunne /St. Martin's, 2010. 78. Print.

Writer2

Integrity is being honest with yourself and with the people around you day in and day out. In other words integrity is something a person would see in you without you speaking a work. It shows in your posture and your stance. For example when David and Magnus' were together and David was preparing to go on stage, Magnus asked him what was his job? At this moment David could have lied and made up something to satisfy the young boys question, instead he just told him that he didn't know which was the truth for the setting. It is like approaching your parents or your boss and they ask you a question about something that is broken. So the ball is now in your court now what are you going to do with it.