ENG8 feedback

Need 2 feedback 1 for writer 1 and writer 2

Write a SEE-I, which stands for State, Exemplify, Example, and Illustrate. Your first sentence will be a statement, your second sentence a restatement using different words, your third, an example from the text, and your fourth sentence, an analogy; something you can draw a comparison to so your reader understands the concept. Your SEE-I topic is community. What is community?

First sentence: Community is. . .

Second sentence: In other words. . .

Third sentence: An example from the novel is. . .

Fourth sentence: It is like…

Writer 1

Community is a connection of a group of people that link their lives together which provides a sense of belonging. In other words a community can be a combination of people as small as a family or group of persons or as large as residents of a town that interaction attributes to a sense of feeling understanding and kinship. An example from the novel is when Flora had gone to the Heath and saw a group of the reliving were being attacked, her sense of feeling “death” inside her emotionally clicked and bound her to the reliving and encouraged her to stand up to try and protect them and help them to their final place of peace. It is like you are part of something bigger and there is a commonality and a tendency to feel a sense of bonding to support and help those we feel connected to.

Writer 2

Community is a value that people share for respecting and caring of one another. In other words a sense of community will assist people in having a sense of belonging, while being cared for with respect. An example from the text is when Aronsson, a neighbor of Mahler at the cottage, interacted with Mahler surprised at seeing him at that time of year. Aronsson was wondering why respectfully Mahler has returned to the cottage. While they were interacting Aronsson asked questions like was Elias, and Anna with him (pg 184). At the time Mahler did not want Elias to know that Elias was dead, and he had a zombie with him. Aronsson at this time in the story was showing a value of community as he was welcoming Mahler back to the cottage. This sense of community is an example of welcoming a new neighbor to the street with either cookies, or flowers.