I need improvements on the paper I already did it but i have the feedback attached from the instructor
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part_1_feedback.docDate: 3/11/2015
Abdullah,
It concerns me that you have very few in-text citations. As emphasized in class, all outside material must be properly cited. The electronic copies of the papers will be verified via Turnit-in for proper citation. Given improper citation could be viewed as plagiarism which comes with a severe penalty at Marymount, you are strongly encouraged to get assistance from the Writing Lab and submit corrections for a better grade. Note that your grade will be adjusted only if all items listed on the feedback are addressed, AND feedback from the Writing Lab is incorporated in your revised version. You are required to submit this rubric with my feedback, and your graded hardcopy to the Writing Lab tutor.
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Feedback |
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Title page |
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· Incomplete |
4/5 |
Good efforts, but note that the title page should follow the APA style as discussed in class. See the class example below from the Power Point slide given out in class. |
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Abstract |
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· Incomplete |
4/5 |
· Good summary · Include where you got data to analyze the trend · Include the findings. |
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Body |
Introduction => Overview |
· Done |
10/10 |
Excellent |
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An evaluation of stock market performance for the past ten years using the stock market indexes. · Discuss the three main market indexes and graph. · Fully explain economic events that led to the peaks and troughs
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· Done · Done |
10/15 17/20 |
· Great job in discussing SP500 and Dow Jones · Re-do Nasdaq. The main index is Nasdaq Composite, not Nasdaq -100 · Your did not retrieve data and create the graphs as requested. Your graphs are copied and pasted from another source. · Good efforts in addressing the events resulting in the peaks and troughs. |
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An in-depth discussion of the three recent US financial crises and the Federal Reserve’s response in terms of macro- economic policies & strategies used to combat the economic downturn.
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· Not Done |
0/20 |
· You need to explain the crises and tools used by the Fed to combat the crisis (conventional and conventional). |
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Discuss the future economic outlook and analysts’ forecast of the stock market. |
· Not Done |
0/15 |
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Conclusion |
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Done |
5/5 |
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References |
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Done |
5/5 |
· The references should follow APA style. See the example from the lectures notes
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Total Grade |
65/100 |
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