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12 April 2015

Name

Student

University

Department of Communication

Room, Building

Avenue

Dear Prof.XXX:

As you requested, I am writing to you to introduce myself, so you will know me better.

I am a sophomore studying marketing in XXX College. My career goal is to become a manger of a company. I expect to learn formal communications skills in this class and I wish to be able to write business letters, business reports and formal presentations in the future. I also wish to learn to use formal wordings and sentence structures so people can understand me better.

I worked for a computer store couple years ago. My job involves assembling computers, installing software, diagnosing problems, delivering products and designing monitoring system layouts. Our customers were individuals, private companies and hospitals. We often have to take customer complains when our products are not working. If server computer in a hospital is broken, we often get there to fix the server. At the same time my colleagues need to communicate with their tech department. I witnessed how my colleagues keep unsatisfied customers and resolve disputes using communication techniques, and I learned communication is a powerful tool.

I also worked as a machine tool operator recently. My job is to make metal products according to blueprints provided. When the blueprints are not clear or procedures are not operable, machine tool operators will have to call blue print drawers in office building. I often see people spend a long time understanding what the other side are talking about. It reminded me my colleagues from the computer store. I realized good communication skills will affect a business in a positive way and my work experience taught me to learn communication well.

I look forward to get to know each other in the future. If you have any questions about me, please feel free to contact me.

Sincerely,

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xxx

xx xxxx St

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xxx.xx3.xxxx (cell)

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