Assignment 4: Persuasive Paper Part 2: Solution and Advantages

Hi Cheryl,

Thank you for submitting the first part of writing your paper where you focused on

the problems that exist. Here you used source material, included the history and

the three problems associated with your topic.

The signposts are

wonderful and

you did a nice job developing the probelms.

Now I want you work on the thesis statement and incorporating the source

material in a meaningful way. Right now you are citing entire paragraphs. This

isn't alowed. EACH sentence that is from sourc

e material must be cited but an

entire paragraph cannot be source material. Remember you need to use the

source material to support your ideas, not replace them.

You will want to see my notes in your text and email me if you have any

questions. Continue

to refine this part of the paper since it will be part of the final

paper for this class. Let me know if you have any questions. Lisa

Hi Cheryl,

Thank you for submitting the first part of writing your paper where you focused on

the problems that exist. Here you used source material, included the history and

the three problems associated with your topic. The signposts are wonderful and

you did a nice job developing the probelms.

Now I want you work on the thesis statement and incorporating the source

material in a meaningful way. Right now you are citing entire paragraphs. This

isn't alowed. EACH sentence that is from source material must be cited but an

entire paragraph cannot be source material. Remember you need to use the

source material to support your ideas, not replace them.

You will want to see my notes in your text and email me if you have any

questions. Continue to refine this part of the paper since it will be part of the final

paper for this class. Let me know if you have any questions. Lisa