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Case Study Analysis Peer Review Form

Writer’s Name Yolonda Staples

Reviewer’s Name Chauncy Stewart

Make revisions based on peer reviews from fellow classmates of your Case Study Analysis Paper. For each of the comments, submit a list of the changes you made to your paper based on the feedback. If you choose not to make the recommended changes, submit a list that offers justification for not making the peer revisions.

Submit to faculty two separate pages of peer review list changes from each classmate. Include both recommended changes and any justifications. Revisions made should show improvement to the content, organization, development, and mechanics of the paper.

1. Reviewer question: What is the author’s thesis?

For Mr. Carl and ABC firm to get their recruitment and orientation process in line they must consider changing and improving lots of things within the HR department and the firm at large.

2. Reviewer question: Is the thesis clearly stated? If not, how would you help the writer restate it?

Yes, thesis is clear. However, I think the thesis should be introduces earlier in the paper.

Writer question: List the changes made based on this feedback. Also list those suggestions that were offered but that you did not make, and explain why you did not make the suggestions.

3. Reviewer question: Does the essay’s body stick to the main topic? If not, where does it digress, and how could the writer revise the paper to make it stay more on the main topic?

Yes, Yolanda’s essay does a great job of sticking to the main topic.

Writer question: List the changes made based on this feedback. Also list those suggestions that were offered but that you did not make, and explain why you did not make the suggested changes.

4. Reviewer question: Does the paper contain any ambiguously-worded or confusing sentences? Please list them below and offer a suggested revision for each one you identify.

I came across no ambiguously-worded or confusing sentences.

Writer question: List the changes made based on this feedback. Also list those suggestions that were offered but that you did not make, and explain why you did not make the suggested changes.

5. Reviewer question: Which closing strategy did the writer use? Is the closing effective? Why or why not? Offer a revision suggestion for making the closing more effective.

Yolanda reiterated her proposed solutions for her closing strategy. She should include actual recommendations for what Carl should do next.

Writer question: List the changes made based on this feedback. Also list those suggestions that were offered but that you did not make, and explain why you did not make the suggested changes?

6. Reviewer question: Please give the writer feedback regarding the essay’s effect on you.

I thought your essay was to the point and well written. Good job.

Writer question: List the changes made based on this feedback. Also list those that were offered but that you did not make, and explain why you did not make the suggested changes.