ENG125 Week 5 Assignment

Hi Laura,

Thank you for your submission this week.

You've got a good start on this. You analyze the theme of race and ethnicity in two pieces. Now, I would go back and revise by adding comparison/contrast of symbol use in each text, of metaphors and/or similes, of characterization, setting, tone, etc.--any of the literary elements that you have not yet discussed fully.

You spend a lot of time summarizing each piece. While it's important to provide a brief summary, you should devote the majority of your essay to analyzing the pieces, not summarizing them.

In terms of organization, I would devote a paragraph to each literary element. In terms of your conclusion, ask yourself what you've learned or what new knowledge has been gained by looking at these two texts, side by side. 

In addition, you'll want to add more sources to strengthen your analysis. You should be looking for outside sources that comment on the texts you've chosen, or the authors, or some aspect that you are writing about. Your sources should be used to support/defend/challenge your opinions about these texts. Use your sources as though they are participants in a conversation about these texts. What do they think? What do you think? Where are the differences and the similarities?

Also, be sure to review my comments within the essay itself. As always, I'm here to help, so don't hesitate to email me with questions. Thanks!

Prof. Markussen

(2.2 / 2.5) Comparison/Contrast: Content

Proficient - Sufficiently compares and contrasts the content in each literary work, while developing strong connections between the two.

(1.9 / 2.5) Comparison/Contrast: Form

Basic - Compares and contrasts the form of each literary work, but at a somewhat superficial level.  Student creates connections between the two works, although, such connections are somewhat limited.

(2.2 / 2.5) Comparison/Contrast: Style

Proficient - Sufficiently compares and contrasts the style in each literary work, while developing strong connections between the two.

(0.19 / 0.25) Written Communication: Genre and Disciplinary Conventions

Basic - Employs some existing conventions for the specific type of assignment, as well as for the specific type of academic field.

(0.38 / 0.5) Written Communication: Syntax and Mechanics

Basic - Displays basic comprehension of syntax and mechanics, such as spelling and grammar. Written work contains a few errors, which may slightly distract the reader.

(0.22 / 0.25) Reading: Analysis

Proficient - Recognizes connections among ideas, text structure, or other textual features, to analyze how they support a sophisticated understanding of the text as a whole.

(0.44 / 0.5) APA Formatting

Proficient - Exhibits APA formatting throughout the paper, however, layout contains a few minor errors.

(0.44 / 0.5) Page Requirement

Proficient - The paper closely meets the page requirements predetermined in the assignment description.

(0.38 / 0.5) Resource Requirement

Basic - Provides over half of the  sources required in the assignment instructions.

Overall Score: 8.35 / 10